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May we...

May we share a lasting love
and love the sharing.

May we share a mutual care
and love the caring.

May we live a tranquil life
and love the living.

May we give each other space
and love the giving.

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    December 28, 2008

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    I appreciate the sentiment - but for me, it is a bit cliche. I also don't think the repetition of 'may we' in such a short piece detracts from the essence.


    • Shenton silver member
      December 30, 2008
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      Melissa

      Thankyou for your comments. I think that perhaps they include an unintended 'don't'. Either way I appreciate them.

      I send you New Year greetings from 'down-under'.

      Shenton