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Silently.



Last night I wept, silently
As the rain splashed on the window pane.
Though it did not trouble the quiet room
Upon my cheeks, the tears left stains.

How calmly the moon rose, silently
As the clouds drift past my window pane.
Though they did not trouble the quiet room
Their shadows upon my heart remain.

So smoothly the blood seeped, silently
As the sun stared through the window pane.
Though it did not trouble the quiet room
Its rays reflect a crimson stain.

My life drifts away, silently
As the world sped past the window pane.
Though it did not trouble the quiet room
I was not missed, my life in vain.




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I wrote this a couple of years ago, if not ok for the comp please delete. WASP.

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  • Death of the Author
    January 22
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    Bravisimo


  • charmander13
    January 11

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    I love your imagery- "As the sun stared through the window pane.", "As the world sped past the window pane"- it's truly beautiful, I think.

    Thank you so much for sharing this thoughtful, thought-provoking write .

    All the best,
    Char


  • islekine gold member
    January 5

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    Glad it was written a couple

    years ago! So heartfelt...so sad...
    Best wishes in the contest!
    Write on!


    • W a s p
      January 10
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      islekine.

      Thank you for calling, reading and commenting... and the applause! WASP.


  • Rheea gold member
    January 4
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    desolation you felt this rise up again. certainly this is welcome. this hurts in my heart and mind.

    • W a s p
      January 10
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      Rheea

      Thank you for your words, so pleased it touched your mind. WASP.


  • Sunshine Always
    December 29, 2008

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    WoW!!!! Heartbeakingly deep my friend.From beginning to end the sadness engulfed me.This is so hauntingly filled with sorrow.Phew !!!! Excellent write......mal..


    • W a s p
      January 3
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      Mal

      Cheers Mal, It is a very sorrowful write, pleased you called... on a lighter note... how are those "donkeys' of yours (LOL!)...ian.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    December 29, 2008

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    WOW

    words of sorrow flow as smooth as your words of love...wow! a true master poet with a golden pen...these words flow like a song from a lovers broken heart and makes me feel the pain that lies within...winner for sure


    • W a s p
      January 3
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      TENDER WOLF.

      Hello Ann, funny how the mood that we are in at the time can affect our writing so much. Thank you for your words Ann, always appreciated...ian.

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