when I was chewing on my lips
to keep myself from screaming
you were lighting joints
to try to dull the pain
the fact that I have never seen you sober
doesn't change the fact that
You're the only one that knows
what I'm thinking when I'm silent
A contest entry
- love by Melissa Gayle.
1000 points, ended December 29, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Intense Write!
Oh oh...sounds like trouble if this is true. You penned this 
of the Contest parameters. I note that you're not consistent with the cap/non cap typing of the word "I". 
This has a fine flow, consistency of thought & your last line definitely speaks of love! Be careful dear! 
Oh...very visual as well!
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oh! thank you! I hate capitalization, and I have to fight with myself to use it properly. I never would have notice that if you hadn't mentioned it. =)
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I love the pictures this write conjured up in my head, like every body has a soul mate in this fucked up world and once you find them, you can cope with anything, as long as you cope together...I am rambling, I really enjoyed your piece and wish you well in the contest!
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I like how this is different than I love you forever that I have read so damn much.
A really sad aspect in this piece though.
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