The rainbow colors are slowly fading
Because without you there are no colors
There is no life or beauty within them
Without you the stars can't shine
All they do is hide within the clouds
All day and night
My love for you is like fire
The flames never die as long as your alive but
If you die then
The flame slowly starts to fade and die too
I need you more then heaven needs angels and
More then hate needs hell
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I hope you like it and please tell me what you think :]
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a very wonderful and touching piece. so very loving towards your loved one. it truly is a special love when you care for someone so deeply. the world seems to be a better place because they are with you. they make the world better for you. nicely written with so much love. keep on writing so passionately!
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Awww thank you so much for your kind words
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So deeply touching and sweet, just so everything, you have explained it all
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Thank you so much for your kind words
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It's awesome!
Wow, this is really beautiful... it really paints a picture,.. very passionate!
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Awe thank you for your kind words. I'm glad you like it
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the need is so strong and you are rooted in deeep..without him you feel the world is lost and angels miss heavens and you are akin..my my..this was intense -
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Thank you so much for your kind words
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This is very good, I enjoyed it a lot.
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perfect, in love. this is so pretty and meaningful.
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Awe thank you! ^^ you should read my recent one and thank you for the comment
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This is sooooo cute. Very well done in showing how you feel for the other person.
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Thanks Purple
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"The rainbow colors are slowly fading"
Great write!
This is
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Thanks Jericho! (I hope I spelled that right)
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Yay ^^
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wow i like this its meloncholie. but i like it!
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Wow i luv this. You've expressed this well! Great write!!!
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Awe thank you for your kind words Star, they mean a lot. I am glad you enjoyed this
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Im glad you shared your words with us!
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Like-wise :]
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Intersting way how you painted out your feelings.
'The rainbow colors are slowly fading
Because without you there are no colors
There is no life or beauty within them'
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Awe thank you for your kind words Purple
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Very great poem love it very creative way to express your feelings for this person
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Awe thank you :]
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you are very welcome
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Awww
Lovely write dear
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Some fixer uppers,
"I need you more then heaven needs angels and
More then hate needs hell"
both of the "then" here should be "than". Your idea and emotion behind the poem is beautiful in its passion but you seem to repeat yourself or say things that should be implied. For example, "The flames never die as long as your alive but
If you die then
The flame slowly starts to fade and die too" - Here you basically say, The flames never die if you're alive and if you're dead then the flames die.
A good write though, I love your background idea
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rainbow colors are afding because he is not around....that was amazing display of your sense of emotional missing the one you love.....guess you creafted this easily enough..I loved this poem so much that I almost thought myself at fault.....just kidding...lol -
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Hehe thank you for your kind words
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Ooooh this was wonderful
I like I like I like
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Awe thank you very much for your kind words
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I need her as well..
but I can't insist her anymore.. so.. I'm fading.. and I'm dieing
nice write
keep writing
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Beautiful! Thanks for sharing ^_^ Keep writing =)
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Beautiful. Excellent ending. You've done well.
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Thank you for your sweet comment
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I like this great work as always bestie
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awesome poem
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humz
nice write
keep penning
it was simple but had meaning behind it
thanks for sharing
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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Thank you for the sweet comment and kind words
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This is hot. I feel the sensation of being in love. Thank you. Peace
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Thank you for the comment
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wow..this is so emotional, I really love this. so cool baby!
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Awe thank you so much sweetie! I am glad you like it
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I like this.
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Thank you for the comment :]
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You are welcome. Check out some of my writing whenever you get the chance.
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the color idea is always a great idea
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Thanks :]
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Right to the point, very pretty.
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aww
i like this poem it's so sweet and it's really good =]
My favourite lines are these:
"Without you the stars can't shine
All they do is hide within the clouds"
I love these lines because it shows how one person is your world and nothing is the same when they're not around.
this poem is great, keep writing =)
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Thanks so much
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Beautiful heartfelt imagery I enjoyed reading your piece it is pure talent I loved the way it pulled on my heart strings as I read it Great Job, excellent flow take care
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its great and it sincerly moved me! so yea its awsome and so true!!! keep writing.
my favorite line:
I need you more then heaven needs angels and
More then hate needs hell
loved it and enjoyed every second it took to read it!
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xxredheadxx
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Amazing!
I loved it!!
*♥*
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Very good :).
I like this, it's very deep and moving. Very well written x.
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i liked this piece.
It is amazingly written.
great job!
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Thanks for the comment I'm glad you enjoyed it
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i know the felling hear to ether way great work i loved howtyou worded it and placed it together great work i loved it XD
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I love this, especially at the end when you say "i need you more then heaven needs angels and more then hate needs hell" great job!!
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Thanks so much for the comment
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fAB
THIS IS REALLY GOOD I LIKE THE FEEL OF THE POEM
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mrow.....(hmm...)
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mrow T.T (so sad)
mrrrrrrroooooooooooooooooow =D (u need a super hug)
*hugs*
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engaging
In line two, I think you should change 'is' to 'are' so it sounds a little more intelegent. Other than that, I really liked this. It's defintely a poem,but it's conversational too, like something you would hear alone with the one you love. -
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Thanks so much for your comment. It means a lot to me. Thanks again for the tip and I am glad you liked it
- Star Crossed Lovers ♥
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Well writen.
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omg this is so awesome it is so deep im speechless. im sorry you feel this way im here for you
-Dying alone
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Wow I cant believe it took me so long to find this poem. Only one word will describe this poem accurately AMAZING!!!
-Adam
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Wow, thanks for such a great comment I am glad you like it. thanks for the sweet comment.
- Star Crossed Lovers ♥
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Hey you are more than welcome. I loved reading this. I miss talking to you hopefully we can talk tonight.
♥,
Adam
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Mmm...Nice poem I love it. I especcially liked "Without you there is no colors."
Great write. Keep writing.
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"Without you the stars can't shine"
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Aaaaw. . . is this about who I think it is? Good write!
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i love the poem so much its so lovely
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No problem. Anytime and I love your display picture. and thanks so much for the comment I really appreciate it
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awww... Sweetheart i LOVE this... i feel wat ur feeling <3
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A great poem filled with love and devotion. Well done.
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Awe, thank you so much for your comment I really appreciate it and I am glad you enjoyed it
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Wow, this is such a great write :]
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emotional...amazing..captivating..yet simple..love it *nods and waves*
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Great write! You poured all your emotions in this poem with such a great style.
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Thank you so much for your comment it makes me smile that you enjoyed it
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i really did enjoy it cause it's beautiful! keep up the good work!
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Wow, this is just so amazing
it's really sweet yet so touching a very enjoyable read like always you are very talented :]
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Judged
This is a sweet poem that given to anyone would be simply marvelous. I do say, this...many people can definitely relate to this. Thank you for entering. Good luck.
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would you mind if i put it in my profile??
i give you full credit of course=]
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Sure no problem =)
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this is a beautiful love poem, This is exactly how i feel for the girl i love=]
any way amazing job with this!
keep it up
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Thanks for the comment ryan it means a lot to me :]
and I am glad you feel that way about her best of luck to you and I ma glad you liked it :] and thanks for the encouraging comment
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kool
not bad. you had some great emotion in it and choose very exact words to show thew real meaning. it was great.
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Wow, you can almost feel the intensity in the words.The poem is so very true.
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Wow this is such a delightful piece I love the imagination in this. It's so beautiful. Sis you have an amazing way with words and my favorite part is the last 3 lines that's is truly brilliant :]
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Once again I read this [poem and I really love the over all depth imagery and fluidity to this piece. yuor poem makes alot of sense and I like the over all point to the poem and even in death we go on cherising and lovein the perosn who mpassed away. while as it is true the flame dies within them it hurts us but its the constant loving reminder to em that if they fall we are there to pick em up and if they lose their way we are there to show em their direction. any ways brilliant write and good luick mwith the contest
Tiger
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