With out you life is a lost dream
That echos with in the heart
With out you life is a broken thing
That tears my soul apart
With out you seems like endless days
That never seem to end
With out you tears my heart apart
With the pain it sends
With out you is like darkness true
That fill the soul with cold
With out you like lost memories
With stories still untold
With out you how can I live
With this love that I bear
With out you will I simply fade
And then who will care
A contest entry
- Quickie by adsaige.
400 points, ended January 4, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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this is a wonderful write from you. i only have one question:
With out you will I simply fade
And will now one care
is now suppose to be no as in no one?
thank you for sharing this with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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So sad and beautiful are your words. The pain is felt as the reader goes from line to line. Repeating Without you, is very emotional. We are seperated for many reasons from loved ones. It matters not why . We miss them the same. Thank you for sharing. Take care dear friend. Hugs and Smiles.
Love and Blessings Always,
Sandy 
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I do think this poem could see a few revisions, and seems more like it's in the rough draft phase. Besides that little thought, I thought this poem did hold very true to the prompt. Thank you for entering. Good Luck.
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Beautiful Melancholy...
I love this poem, it is so filled with emotion. Wishing you all the best in the contest, and of course, best wishes for a wonderful New Year filled with peace, joy, love and much success!!! You are a poetic prodigy!!
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xx Cyn xx
P.S. Are you keeping your journal of poetic writings up-to-date?!!?
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