my dead mind knows well
his kind of abuse means hell
prisoner of cell
my dead black heart bore
holes ooze out bloody galore
old funeral door
my dead clock hours stop
future breaks and chaos pop
good memories chop
my dead dark love dies
full of untrustworthy lies
fiery red flame cries
my dead soul gives in
other portal opens thin
forgive his poor sin
Author notes
my late father
A contest entry
- big bang prewrites only contest by serenity silvermoon.
900 points, ended January 5, 124 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Honourable Mentions Only! by amaranthine lover.
775 points, ended January 22, 63 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - childhood memories of abuse - PW allowed - PIC Prompts too by couldbeworse.
850 points, ended March 3, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thanks for sharing.
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i liked the repetition and the flow in your piece. thanks so much for entering. words were very powerful and poignant.
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Very... emotional in a way. I love how you started every line with "My dead". It made the poem more powerful. I love love love the first stanza. Good job!
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thanks!
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You're very welcome and thank you. I'm very sorry you canot hear but you are a beautiful poet for sure =) Thanks for your comment on my poem. I put lots of time and devotion into each and everyone. Today I've been inspired and I wrote 3, and now I'm on the 4th one =) And if it's okay with you, can I add you to my poetic friends =)?
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yes and i love to add you too!
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Awesome =)
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