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An Observation One December Day

Winter, with its ragged silvery locks

solemnly covers all

like unkind years

 

trees, bemoan like elderly souls

with limbs too brittle

 

skies are eyes grayed over

no longer showing their brightness

 

however, bulbs and buds, like infants

sleep in the womb

awaiting spring birth. 

 

 

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  • Rhythm Child
    December 31, 2008

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    thankyou for entering. I hope you enjoy the contest and have fun.

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    December 27, 2008

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    Ah..artist and naturalists eye observing with imagery winter with it's vivid portrayals, human like forms...yet spring awaits in slumber....Beautiful write, friend...


  • Haygood gold member
    December 27, 2008
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    Good imagery.

    I like the metaphor of winter and an elderly person, and a babe in the womb. Very good.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    December 27, 2008

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    I just love your nature writes and how your imagery is always so wonderfully done MJ. Spring birth renews all...