Dance with me, my love
Twirl away my fears
Dance with me,
Dip me down, mo chroi
Dance with me,
Chase away my nightmares
Dance with me, my heart
Kiss away my tears
Dance away with me...
Leave this world
As an afterthought
Come away, come run away
Hold me, sweetheart
Into forever's night
Author notes
Gotta write an ending to this...
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It is lovely. It has a sweetness that is best understood by the person it was written to...for they know the intent and caring that went into these words.
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Awh, thanks...But ironically enough I didn't write it to anyone in particular
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this is really cute. kinda in you own world with not a care. makes life seem so much happier, so much simpler, you know. It something we all want. To be twirled around with someone to love us. and to feel like we will always have someone around. nice thoughts! Great poem!!!!
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Suh-weet.
Nice flow here - and the repition and syntax lent it a catchy rhythm, in my opinion.
RJ
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If only love and chasing away the fear were more like a dance... we might know when it would end
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Good
That's all I'll say, since that's all you asked.
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delicious use of imagery
Excellent use of imagery makes one feel as they are being asked to dance with you personally. A rampant feel of isolation seems to be hidden in the words as well. Excellent write keep it up and never let the ink dry
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