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Sweet Child 'O Mine



She's got a smile and it seems to me -
so young, with ivory skin and a sincere smile,

I know it only lasts for a while, til the cold world presses

it's ugly face against the frozen glass, which we call fate.

You're beautiful, just like a freshly bought toy -

sentiments just the same, never before seen the world.

That energy, it's as fresh as freshly laundered linen

the look upon your face is so innocent and carefree,

how cruel it is to allow you to grow up in this attrocity.

Reminds me of childhood memories,

where everything was as fresh as the bright blue sky.
I still remember those tea parties, rainbow coloured bracelets -

we used to pass them around in the playground, us girls

giggling at the look the boys gave us as we played princess.

The primary coloured teacups and princess pink dresses,

that we used to play dress up [we're going to see the queen in london, Mummy].
The sun looked so serene; smiling down on me, as if serenading me -

the moon enchanted me too, with it's intense illumination.

Now and then when I see her face,

it takes me away to that special place
and If I stare too long, I'll probably break down and cry.
It's beautiful, watching you're etch-a-sketch eulogies,

so pretty and natural, as you wipe away words you don't even mean.

Clumbsy chalk pictures, that are as enchanting as Venus's voice

lay plastered on a blackboard; black beauty ridden by aurora,

her golden locks flying freely in the autumn wind.

She's got eyes of the bluest skies

as if they thought of rain.

I'd hate to look into those eyes

and see an ounce of pain.
Then the shadows of torment litter your eyes

like little chunks of coal, that rip apart the heart -

where once naivity was, lies ignorance, happiness slain.

There's something beautiful now, but the coldness climbs,

one day you wont be that innocent little girl I once was.

Darling, I'd ask you to promise me to never grown up,

but only Peter Pan can keep that promise.

Author notes

Midnight-x-Rose // 18 // Guns 'n' Roses // Sweet Child o' Mine // The chorus and song in general, how it makes me feel.


Oh the loss of youth and how sad it is, to grow up.
Lovely. Sorry it's so bad. Hope it works alright for you.

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  • I liked it, just not a winner. Thanks for entering!

  • oh wow i really like this. i love the show of childlike innocence and memories. the last lines really hit it home.


  • vaseline
    February 24

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    awful to grow up? gosh tell me about it haha. this is awfully sweet, i dont think about having children any time soon, but im pretty sur a poem like this could make mostly anyone wish theyd have a little one drooling on the floor just to experience the bliss of lines such as
    It's beautiful, watching you're etch-a-sketch eulogies,

    so pretty and natural, as you wipe away words you don't even mean.

    this is damn well written! thank you so much for entering


  • DogFish silver member
    February 20
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    tugs at the heartstrings...

  • poets whisper silver member
    February 16
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    beautiful. Thank you for entering, I especially like the last line.


  • LoveLikePoetry
    December 27, 2008

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    This is beautiful
    I love it, really I do.
    I like how the poem was so different than the actual song.
    Great job, and good luck. Thanks for entering!

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