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Who am I


                    Who am I

I am myself
I am the present and I am the past
I am my father my grandfather
And his father before him
Stretching back to infinity
My children are the future
And will in time become the past

I am a friend
And I am an enemy
I am truth and I am lies
I’m weak and I am strong
I can love and I can hate

I am human.

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  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    March 4
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    Thought-provoking...

    I love this poem! Thank you for sharing!!
    xx Cyn

    • bowmore bill
      March 4
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      Hello Cyn, thank you for taking the time to read Who am I
      I really beleive in the subject.

      All my best wishes to the family.


  • liltulip gold member
    February 18
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    lovely!

    My children are the future
    And will in time become the past


  • Electric Sunrise gold member
    January 28

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    Hey,

    Nice piece here, only one problem I can pick out with it is the issue concerning punctuation. I am, by no means perfect with it myself, but for a reader, punctuation sets the pace and flow of not just each individual line and stanza, but the piece as a whole. Your stanza's at present just run into one another, to read them allowed as is would require vast amounts of lung power lol

    ASIDE from that, nice work, and thanks for the entry