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A Euphonic Frenzy

 

Melodies float

in vanilla incense.

 

Delicate ears

embraced by rhythmic beats,

reflected by vibrating ripples.

[I could lie here forever.]

Author notes

Prompt: The echo of your heartbeat
20 words
15 minutes

Picture Credit: http://th05.deviantart.com/fs12/300W/i/2006/267/b/d/forever_we_will_lye_together_by_elizabethjaggers.jpg

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  • Meroza
    December 31, 2008

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    The ending is perfect. The poem is adorable, the meaning brilliant.

    Congrats


  • Haygood gold member
    December 28, 2008
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    Beautiful word pictures.


  • Jesann gold member
    December 28, 2008

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    Beautiful !!
    Lovely imagery..."Melodies float
    in vanilla incense"
    Congratulations on the silver, well done.


  • Hikari Lady
    December 28, 2008

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    Beautiful write. I enjoyed reading it so much. thanks for sharing and congrates on the silver.

    Much love
    ~Noor


  • myrataal silver member
    December 28, 2008

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    Congratulations, Ylova ...

    on your wondrous Silver!

    You weave words from true feeling and true feelings from words ... Well done! Loved the sensoric undertones in this write.


    Love
    Myra


  • penman gold member
    December 27, 2008
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    Excellent

    Such a beautiful write. Congratulations on the silver.


  • oceanbluize
    December 27, 2008

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    Devastatingly Lovely!

    Who would not want to be caressed by those immortal words...forever? Can I? Just beautiful, good luck!
    Love, John.


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    December 27, 2008

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    this brings my senses to life!
    ..."in vanilla incense." The smell alone is astounding!'
    Such a creative and imaginative piece!!....I love it, Superb    !Laughing


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    December 27, 2008

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    Lovely work my dear friend!
    I love the imagery in this too.
    All the best to you here!




    Jeremy0826


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    December 27, 2008
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    Beautiful imagery.


  • thepoetssoul
    December 27, 2008

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    This is a magnificient piece of poetry.
    Splendid beauty and vivid imagery.
    May you be blessed in all you do.

    Tony


  • Joseph Hollis
    December 27, 2008

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    This one has a very musical and relaxing feel to it. A gorgeous take on the prompt. It reads like a pleasant memory. Best of luck to you.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    December 27, 2008

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    This is beautiful I love it and yes with that sound we could lie there forever thanks for your entry into my contest be well.


  • In Too Deep1
    December 27, 2008

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    WOnderful take on the prompt. I love the way that you have used the senses to give emotion, color and movement. A most enjoyable read, and best wishes in the comp


  • luna-midnight gold member
    December 27, 2008
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    WOW!
    freeking amazing...i love it..its so brill. and lovely
    Stephanie, love you ♥


  • luna-midnight gold member
    December 27, 2008

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    what about me

    p.s. good luck

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