In reply to Margaret's http://allpoetry.com/poem/4899581
With gentle wings to sleep you rise
needing but to close your eyes
I view with envy and surprise
effortless, no sleep denies.
I love the form, a couplet here!
Is it to show that sleep is near?
My old habit makes me late
to venture up to dormant state.
Past evening duties quite sedate
my wings refuse to navigate . . . .
the things I left undone!
Mine's called "squirrel-caging."
where all solutions that are born
arrive forgotten in the morn.
Terry Dec 27 08
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I love your form and couplet and I like the "squirrel-caging" idea.
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I read Margarets poem and both of you have done a splendid job of writng what happens when we compose those near perfect poems just before drifting off to sleep. But come the morn I almost never remember what the poem was or even what it was about. And I berate myself for not taking the time to write it down the night before.
Thank you for sharing this awesome poem, Terry
Dee
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And thank YOU
--for coming to read!
That's what they are written for, after all
Seriously though, you have really made it worth while!
Margaret has an uncanny way of inspiring new poems--and good thing too or would I write at all?
Terry
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I've had many dreams where I thought I ought to be writing
but it was all to easy to keep sleeping -
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Completely natural, even!
When tired, I just roll over... Last night I dreamt I had written a perfect poem. On waking I remembered only the lovely feeling of having written a perfect poem! -
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usually, it's just a vission
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I find it ironic that anxious thoughts that we indulge instead of sleeping are ultimately fruitless; except in rare occasions I don't give thoughts free rein anymore.
My form was just 5 couplets! Yours is far more interesting with monorhyme quatrains. Thank you for the praise and poetic reply.
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That positive approach is good advice.
Unfortunately when fatigue has me cross-eyed the immensity of my LOAD cannot be ignored. (Logic tells that nothing is so important it can not wait, but who listens?) -
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I know, you have a lot to bear.
A mantra or prayer is tremendously comforting.
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