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Walang masabi


I felt you breathing in my thoughts
a breath as subtle as the whisper of spring.
And though I couldn't begin to guess your name,
I sensed you were out there, somewhere.

For years I struggled with a sense of you.
I searched the eyes of every face for a clue,
but no-one looked at me the way I knew
would leave me lost for what to say.

chorus #1:

walang masabi
  nothing than words can say
walang masabi
  take my breath away
walang masabi
  more than words can share
walang masabi
  something's in the air
  something's in the air
  something's in the air
    oh in the air
walang masabi

In time I courted solitude,
prepared to walk the long remainder of life
without the comfort of companionship,
and yet I felt strangely at ease.

Then like the rising of a tropical sun
you rose illuminating all of my dreams,
a gift beyond the spectrum of my hopes
that left me lost for what to say.

chorus #2:

walang masabi
  more than words can share
walang masabi
  something's in the air
walang masabi
  nothing words can say
walang masabi
  take my breath away
  take my breath away
  take my breath away
    oh away
walang masabi

I saw the blank unwritten years
stretching white into a life alone,
meditating in the silence of
a still and unusual peace.

But now I'll journey through the days ahead
with promise written onto every page,
a sense of joy I never knew before
you left me lost for what to say.

chorus #3:

walang masabi
  more than words can say
walang masabi
  take my breath away
walang masabi
  nothing words can share
walang masabi
  something's in the air
  something's in the air
  something's in the air
    oh in the air
walang masabi

Now let us join and fix our eyes
upon the blue horizon of our life
and venture all undaunted through the years
believing in our path together.

For you, mahal ko, are my utmost heart,
a mystery beyond imagination.
I never felt my spirit pulse before
you left me lost for what to say.

chorus #4:

walang masabi
  nothing words can share
walang masabi
  something's in the air
walang masabi
  more than words can say
walang masabi
  take my breath away
  take my breath away
  take my breath away
    oh away
walang masabi


Author notes

Walang masabi is a Tagalog expression meaning something like "beyond words" or "nothing", in the sense that it's nothing words can express.

Mahal ko is Tagalog for "My Love".

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  • Dixie Dawn gold member
    May 27

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    This is beautiful, its so hard to find lyrics or poetry that say exactly what you want, but this is something I would say and so I love it...and this my favorite part were the words in my head for years..

    a breath as subtle as the whisper of spring.
    And though I couldn't begin to guess your name,
    I sensed you were out there, somewhere.
    For years I struggled with a sense of you.
    I searched the eyes of every face for a clue,
    but no-one looked at me the way I knew
    would leave me lost for what to say

    its perfect, Thank you!!

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  • Mercury Rising
    May 22
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    Excellent lyrics to a great song. Keep up the wonderful works.


  • venomoustoad silver member
    May 22

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    I like this song. It carries with it a melody without haveing to hear anything external. Toad that I am, I usually cringe from love songs but this one was too good to miss.Much more of this and I'd be tempted to give love one more try.

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    • Zahhar gold member
      July 1
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      I'm something of a love-song toad myself. Maybe this is why I put special effort into making this poem-song come to life.

      Glad you enjoyed, sir.

  • Kari gold member
    May 20
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    I loved the lyrics. Had to read it again.

  • Kajal lutchminarian
    May 18
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    A good read. Was this song ever sung? I'd love to know where i could hear it

    • Zahhar gold member
      July 1
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      I do sing it, but not very well because of something wrong with my throat. Glad you enjoyed, Kajal.

  • xfallen-isolationx
    April 18
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    sorry for that i mean lyrics

  • xfallen-isolationx
    April 18

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    like it yahhhh....right
    "walang masabi
    nothing words can share
    walang masabi
    something's in the air
    walang masabi
    more than words can say
    walang masabi
    take my breath away
    take my breath away
    take my breath away
    oh away
    walang masabi"

    so your are tagalog...
    taga pilipinas ka...
    at ako naman cebuano...

    i like this lirycs...
    i even like it for sure if you have a video or something that you sing this song right?????
    meron ka bang ibang nakikilalang taga pilipinas na nasa AP???????

    GUSTO mo bang sumali sa grupong ito?????
    "the power of darkness"
    http://allpoetry.com/group/show/the+power+of+darkness

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    • Zahhar gold member
      May 27
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      I'll have to have my fiancee (the one the poem is written for) translate your comment for me. I'm pretty sure though that I can assume you liked the poem. Glad you enjoyed!

  • magneticstorm
    March 29

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    Glad to learn from this.

    I've been struggling with songwriting lately. The songs of moderate speed are the toughest for me to write. This one would work for me.

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    • Zahhar gold member
      May 27
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      Glad I could inspire something. Thanks for reading, and for your thoughts.

  • white stone gold member
    March 28
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    I said once that the structure of your poetry made me feel like mine were as tinker toys in the shadow of towers. I maintain that. This evoked a feeling of peace in me with it's well calculated meter and flow. I do not aim to flatter, but to let you know that your work has always inspired me.

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    • Zahhar gold member
      May 27
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      Thank you, sir. This is a special piece of writing--for my fiancee. Knowing her has opened me to a world--a universe--of insights and understandings. Perhaps I'm still too overwhelmed by it all to know how to transpose it all into new language. Maybe that's still coming. I'd certainly like to claw my way once and for all out of my writing funk.

      Thanks for stumbling upon this and for your thoughts.

  • log-home-guy-Nic
    March 25

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    very well versed

    a song something I have not been able to do as of yet. very nicely written excellent flow and imagery in this art  " breath as subtle as the whisper of spring." really like this line beautiful

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    • Zahhar gold member
      May 27
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      For me songs just happen when they happen, which is rare. I think this might be the third poem I've ever written with a melody already in mind for it.

      Glad you enjoyed, sir.

  • Summer Dawn
    March 24
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    beautiful write. true poetry and music in form. provides a great feeling of love.


    • Zahhar gold member
      May 27
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      As coincidence would have it, I got a chance to practice singing this song today. In fact, I decided to change one small word as a result.

  • SwaGGtastic
    March 9
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    Greatness!

    Hey This is deep! Great job. U started this out right at me.. Kept me reading!
  • ecrivain01
    March 5
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    Marvelous ...

    and completely unlike you. I'm happy to say that the change is not unbecoming, albeit not what I'd expected before I clicked on this.


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    • Zahhar gold member
      March 18
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      Unlike me? I have a friend who complains bitterly about my writing of "romantic" poetry. He says it's a waste of my time and talents. But maybe it's unlike me in some respect. I haven't written lyrics to a song in quite some time--though when I was a teen and early adult, a lot of my poems were intended to work as potential lyrics.

  • Chemicals
    March 5

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    This is truly unique,
    But tell me, why keep the chorus' way out on the side, I'm new to poetry and I'm still kinda confuzzled by this confusing situation. But nontheless I liked the poem, I could keep up and I always knew where you were headed next. Great work and continue to write G.

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    • Zahhar gold member
      March 18
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      Well it's the way I've seen choruses formatted in songs I've read in the past. So I just went with it.

      Glad you felt this was unique.

  • DogFish silver member
    February 17

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    "Walang masabi" what a musical expression! And it really adds to the lyrical quality of this joyful celebration of love.

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    • Zahhar gold member
      February 27
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      It does have a neat flow to it. Do you know how to pronounce it?

      • DogFish silver member
        March 1
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        I could only guess that it is pronounced as it is spelled...but I know that is a dangerous presumption to make about a language one has no knowlege about!

        • Zahhar gold member
          March 7
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          Let's see...

          Let underlined segments represent accented syllables. No aspiration in the "h", they're just there to guide pronunciation:

          "Wuh-lang muh-sah-bee"

          I think that's right.

  • Cant force beloved
    February 11
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    Zahhar this is lovely. ♥


  • Kari gold member
    January 27

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    I have never heard of that word before but now that I have I like it. Whenever I see it anywhere I will think back to this song because it sticks with you after you read it.

    Kari

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    • Zahhar gold member
      January 27
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      Two words actually. No, wait, four. Can't leave out "mahal ko" later down the way. Those mean "love" and "mine"--or something along those lines. So "love of mine". "Walang" and "Masabi" are beyond me to define independently, but together they define something like "speechless" or "out of words".

      Glad you enjoyed!

  • Borglesnarf
    January 25
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    interesting

    I like it


  • contess
    January 22
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    reaaaaaaaaaaaly nice and sweet,touches the insides


  • x-SuicidaLHeart-x
    January 17
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    nice poem
    amazing..
    btw..u knw how to speak filipino??..
    yea coz im a fil..
    hehe..


    • Zahhar gold member
      January 25
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      I don't know how to speak it. My fiance is Filipina, so I have to pepper a few Tagalog words in my first song to her. I've been walang masabi since the day we met!

  • Classified-Reject
    January 7
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    this is quite breath taking. I enjoyed this very much.


  • grammabuff
    January 6

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    Amazing!

    Usually I find songs are songs and poems are not. What you have shared with us here is both song and poem.

    Good Work.

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    • Zahhar gold member
      January 25
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      In the tradition of the troubadour. A good song should make a decent poem. A good poem should make a great song. Glad you enjoyed!

  • possion apple gold member
    January 4
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    great one

    this is a well thought out story that you writen and it sound like everything a poem and song but than again a short story

    • Zahhar gold member
      January 6
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      Yes it is also a story. Of this there can be no doubt. You might find "Ode for Joy" of interest. A poem I wrote for the same person who inspired this. It's also a fragmented story.
  • Virgoan
    December 30, 2008

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    Sir,

    It is nice to be back and read your work.

    I think I know who inspired you to write this piece...lol

    The whole piece is good for me except for this part:

    'Now let us join and fix our eyes
    upon the blue horizon of our life
    and venture all undaunted through the years
    trusting in the angels together'.

    The last line bothers me a bit. Not sure but I know you can pull a better line.

    I'll be back in a few days to read this again.

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    • Zahhar gold member
      January 6
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      It's nice to hear from you. Been wondering where you went.

      Yes I think you know who inspired this piece, rin.

      I've adjusted that line that caught your eye. Something came to me that feels much more pertinent to us, our experience, and the compatible aspects of our respective beliefs.

  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    December 27, 2008

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    Superb plus

    Ah, tis a fine write/song indeed, my friend. You've expressed your thoughts quite well indeed. Thanks for sharing this one with us.

    • Zahhar gold member
      December 28, 2008
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      At some point I'll try to link up an MP3 of my attempting to sing it.

  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    December 27, 2008

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    just like the title
    walang masabi...it also means speechless


    It's refreshing for me to read a Tagalog poem especially I am a Filipina so I can feel the sentiments more clearly...

    I never felt my spirit pulse before
    you left me lost for what to say.

    I love this part a lot, and then again I thought...
    wala akong masabi.


    Anna Lee

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    • Zahhar gold member
      December 28, 2008

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      It looks like I'll be revising this poem some as the weeks wear on, so return once in awhile and have another look. I'm glad you enjoyed this effort. The person this is written for tells me you know one another.
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