an open latch
brings to loneliness
a sudden swivet
of snow-slip kisses
and a deep flurry of flame
towers high
Author notes
Prompt: 20 words on picture
In a list
A contest entry
- Give me a short!!! [[Picture Prompt]] by retribusive.
640 points, ended January 8, 2009, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Well, I think this is super. Extremely evocative. The first stanza is brilliant. I hung up on towers, initially, thinking it was a noun. As a verb it is much stronger.
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Simple sweet but the end seems to be lacking.
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Well each statement before was rich in detail and imagery, so it just seems to me that it needs to be followed with writing that matches. However you have written alot more and alot longer then me so you must have a reason.
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I think the verb towers is rich in meaning ...
that is why I used it ... and also as a metaphor in visuality and in transcending.
Main Entry: tower
Part of Speech: verb
Definition: rise above
Synonyms: ascend, be above, dominate, exceed, extend above, look down, look over, loom, mount, overlook, overtop, rear, soar, surmount, surpass, top, transcend
Roget's 21st Century Thesaurus, Third Edition
See?
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Great take on the picture! I love your vocabulary!
Well done and best of luck to you in the contest.
Much love
Ylova
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Wow!!!
Amazing, so much imagery, and so much said in few words! Bravo, you did an awesome job here! Thanks for sharing, a plesure reading you. 
-Timothy
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Excellent
Wow, incredible implications in relation to the picture prompt. Very well written, indeed. Thanks for sharing this one. -
I am not a kind of poet who can say so much with only 20 words like you do, poetess. This is a kind of eternal and everlasting poetry.
~Sonja~
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should of won gold pretty poetess.
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This would suggest leaving the latch open! How lovely you have made this scene.
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Beautiful and deep, I of course loved it. Keep penning.
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Dragonface is right.
short but awesome,i like it
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Perfect
I couldn't say it better. Amazing use of words, so simple, but amazing -
its amazing what a simple touch, or kiss can do to one's senses.
keep up the passion.
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Also..
I featured for 4 clicks for ya
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Thank you so much, Poet.
You are so kind!
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I love this Myra! The poem goes excellent with the prompt and the picture. I connected with the words on a deep level...Best Wishes in your contest!
Love and Light,
~Raymond~
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