Lies and hopeless smiles
Breaking me to the core
destroying each and every sadness
making me want more.
Addicted to the past
dwelling in your sacred eyes
kindly leaving without a smile
just pausing on goodbyes
wishing the wind away
could you cry or bleed a flood
i still pine alone for you
And fantasize for blood
I Steal your every glance
But safely hiding my heart
Every breath moves you closer
Now we're not a world apart
Killing me so softly
Depression your breaking me down
this heart is quickly giving up
one day i'll hit the ground
Just one look in your hazel eyes
and it will freeze the way i cry
so i will never feel again
in this numbness i shall die.
*Her Tears Stained Her Face & Her Best Friend The Blade*
Author notes
this is about my depression and my relationship with the blade. xx
thanks for reading xx
A contest entry
- I wanna feel like im close to something real by Zannah.
700 points, ended January 1, 12 entries
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this is a very interesting piece in itself. i liked it. its very dark yet very real. good job=
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This is great. It explains the ups and downs of the addiction to cutting. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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As the self-professed masochist I am, I relate to this perfectly. The piece is well composed, but I think if you were to edit it at all, you might actually look t the grammatics/punctuation of it.
Still, very well done. The feelings are captured quite well, and you have a definite flare to reaching the darker feelings.
Bravo, and thank you for entering!
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That was really good. You capture so many feelings in your words.
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Wow, I really like this. The rhyme isn't pressed, and it flows pretty well. Over all, this is a great write dear, I really am liking it.
Gwen
p.s. everything you said is so true, the addiction is there...
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Really amazing but so sad
This poem makes you feel pain and sorrow but its message is very open you are an amazing poet
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"Just one look in you hazel eyes
and it will freeze the way i cry
so i will never feel again
in this numbness i shall die."
those lines hit me really hard, especially the last two. Having dealt with these feelings for about a year and a half, I know exactly how you feel. It really does take over you. Well penned, I like your style and how you got these emotions across. I think many on this site can relate.
Well penned &hearts
~HH
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