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Lunchtime - Long Ago



I miss those daisy chain days;

sitting on the grass in the playground,

singing songs little girls do -

looking up at the trees overhead,

memorising each and every shape

& how the world was made.

There's something beautiful about the summer sun,

when it hits my naked lower leg & the breeze

soothes me, as I look around at the giggling kids
I'm one of them, small and so naive.

Sandwich in hand, watching Anne on the log;

hiding my fruit from the feasting flies around,

whilst watching the birds & the bees soar above -
Those days the birds were just a pretty presentation

& the bees a mere honey holding nuisance.

Then the bell rings; I'm lifting myself of the bark of a tree,

whilst packing away the remainder of my personal property.

It was so long ago when the grass on my bare feet brought joy

& made me giggle, wrinling my young, curious nose.

...That was too long ago.

Author notes

About when I used to go to school. Without a care in the world, so innocent and pure. I wish that it wasn't over 10 years ago now. But now I'm nearly 19, I can feel the strain. I hate knowing about the world. It disturbs me.

Hope you like it. Sorry if it's bad.

Midnight-x-Rose
option 2. summer memories.

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  • Brlsbb
    March 10
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    thank you for the entree

  • ImNotTheAnswer
    January 29

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    awww, I truly enjoyed reading this. I love reading about summer, when we are in the dead if winter in Canada. This was an awesome take on the prompt.
    Thanks for entering.

    .xo


  • BadBlood
    January 23
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    This is a very descriptive piece and I like it. The way you paint pictures with your words is gratifying. As I read along, I felt as if I was there myself. There are several typographical errors here but you can just edit them but it doesn't really affect the entirety of the poem. Well done.


  • Meroza
    January 11

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    This poem is so cute and I adore it. The relaxing and innocent youth and the thirst of knowlege, but as you already know, that knowlege isn't desirable once you've receved it.
    Favorite lines:
    "Those days the birds were just a pretty presentation

    & the bees a mere honey holding nuisance. "
    Beauty.

    10/10
    Best of luck


  • couldbeworse
    December 30, 2008

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    loved this poem. fav parts:

    There's something beautiful about the summer sun,
    when it hits my naked lower leg & the breeze
    soothes me, as I look around at the giggling kids
    I'm one of them, small and so naive.

    Sandwich in hand, watching Anne on the log;
    hiding my fruit from the feasting flies around,
    whilst watching the birds & the bees soar above -
    Those days the birds were just a pretty presentation
    & the bees a mere honey holding nuisance.

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