Help, come save me,
Says that small voice inside,
Love me and care for me,
Please dont run and hide.
Hug me and touch me,
Just notice me here,
See through this brick wall,
Confront my fear.
Make me feel safe,
Warm nurtured, prepared,
So i can live on,
With out being scared.
Hear my torn whispers,
Dont ignore what i say,
That you'll accept my small presence,
Is what i do pray.
Please, please, just listen,
Hear my silent cry,
Dont push me aside,
So i slowley die.
I'm here cant you see me,
Cant you hear what i say,
All i want is your love,
And i will wait for that day.
Tell me i'm safe,
That all will be ok,
Tel me your with me,
That forever you'll stay.
Show me compassion,
Dont toss me aside,
How would you have lived,
If i had have died.
Can you not hear me,
Dont you know who i am,
I am your childhood,
Shouting out as loud as i can.
I live inside you,
Im the young you, within,
Please now just listen,
Cos together we'll win.
A contest entry
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I hope this doesnt trigger anything for any one. Please leave me a comment, good, bad, what ever you feel. Just please be a little sensative as they are all true stories about my life so far x
Comments
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I enjoyed reading this!
You did a great job of giving a 'life' to that inner child, as well as a voice and letting them speak out honestly and openly, no matter how vulnerable it made them / you -
I think also that many people will be able to identify with this piece!
Thanks for sharing it with us
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Your poem flowed very well, and I felt as though you had a deep connection to the subject matter of the piece. You expressed the emotion genuinely- and I applaud you for that.
My one suggestion would be to perhaps split up the poem into shorter stanzas, I feel that this would give your poem some convenient pauses, for the reader to reflect on your words.
Overall, I enjoyed this- keep up your writing!
All the best and thanks for entering,
KP
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This was a great read. The flow was great, and the imagery was very good. There are a few mispellings although I'm sure that was just you typing to fast
Line 32 however, I would've put "If I would have died" or "If I would've died". Other than that it was a very nice read. Good job, and good luck.
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What a great read this one is! I really enjoyed it. Though it does trigger memories I would rather forget... You did a great job on this one!
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awww im so sorry this triggered for you.....if you ever need to talk im here. thank you for the comment too.....means a lot
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WOW!
this is amazing! i love it its got so many emotions in it...i cried when i read this ='( but at least your looking on the bright side! yu will win course yu will yu are a strong person...i know yu are. xxxxx
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thanks babe, I wrote a reply to it too...it the next poem. it just so stranger how i have this voice of my child within, ie my childhood child who got lost in all the shit that went on,. I hate her cos i kinda blame her for the reason im so fukd up now xxxxxxxx
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