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God Is a Multi-Tasker

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sorrow

once rocked empty
cradles and unanswered
prayers echoed lullabies into
her soul
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broken
a dream tick-tocked
picket fenced hope faded
leaving loneliness and her heart
paid toll

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faithful
without proof she
wouldn’t give up on Him
finding courage to believe in
His love
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one day
answers came on
angel wings whispering
divine messages He sent from
above
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blessing
disguised as strife
purpose revealed by time
realizing her empty house held
reason
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melted
ice made puddles
dreams no longer stood still
winter's cold replaced by a new
season
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sunshine
kissed her life with
one man one boy one girl
missing only what would become
her name
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mother
and wife she turned
 happiness warmed her home
four identical prayers answered
the same

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grace in

 trust proved fruitful

love-alone-grown garden

filled hungry hearts with laughter

again

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simple

things became the

truest of life's treasures

thanks to a multi-tasking God

amen

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dedicated to Stan with love

Author notes

a true story ....

Double Cinquain Crown

2,4,6,8,2 = cinquain ...... X 5 = cinquain crown ....X 2 = double cinquain crown

contest rules: no punctuation, caps only for I or God.

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  • Whyitt U
    February 24

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    This is absolutely brilliant...I knew it was gold when I was only half done reading it. I'm glad I stumbled upon this...what a joy to read!!

    wyattxxx


  • CandiKisses
    January 18

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    I had to tell you how beautiful I think this poem is. The imagery is wonderful and it is full of feeling that is transferred eloquently onto paper. I love the way you write.


  • CanadianGirl1
    January 10

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    Definitely deserving of the gold.. congrats! such a great write! I loved the entire rhythm and the style that you used with this one.. different from anything I've ever read.. keem em coming I miss reading your work!


  • sheltered
    January 6
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    quite an original concept
    thus great title
    and you rounded it out nicely
    congrats


  • Arkbear gold member
    January 5

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    Whoa!

    99.9999% perfect......>>

    *filled hungry hearts with laughter* = 7 sylls....should be 8 -

    Standing ovation in Arkansas!

            

    I would like to place this on my Profile Page here, as well as on my homepage...pweeeez?

    I have nothing to suggest nor critique here.....the message is.....gosh......what a message....and your Form......wow......who taught you such perfection

    Best in contest, paws down..this Double CinQ Garland is spectacular......first one I have ever seen.......God bless Jamie,

    Bear ~


    • jamiedoring
      January 5

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      THANK YOU!

      Dang it that I should have checked my count AFTER editing! lol.....thank you so much for the wonderful compliment and I would be honored to be on YOUR homepage! You TOTALLY made my night with that! Thanks again!

      Jamie


  • islekine gold member
    January 1

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    Aloha Jamie!

    As usual ......well penned!
    I don't even try these anymore!
    so not sure the count is right...cause that's the part
    that always gets me..
    Best wishes in the contest!
    Write on!


  • faderman1959
    December 29, 2008
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    I love stories with a happy ending and this had one. A pleasure through and through!


  • Patpowers silver member
    December 28, 2008

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    Great work on this Jamie! You did awesome on this cinquain. THANKS SO VERY MUCH!!

  • dx d by me
    December 27, 2008
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    Lovely poetry. Rich imagery and contextually "a true story" makes it all the better. Geo


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    December 27, 2008

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    This is lovely and the presentation looks lovely as well. I loved these two lines:
    a dream tick-tocked
    picket fenced hope faded
    Truly it is ALL good though! Pam

  • Thor-201
    December 27, 2008
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    Wonderful. Well put together.


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    December 27, 2008
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    Beautiful write and form


  • Swan song gold member
    December 27, 2008
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    This is nothing short of a stunning crown cinquin Good luck with this I am in awe

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    December 27, 2008

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    Oh my Goodness If this does not win gold I will cry it is just amazing beyond amazing good luck in this contest best wishes always be well.


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    December 27, 2008

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    a beautiful penning, and a lovely form you've chosen to use. As always, an enjoyable read. Well done.
    Rory

  • dillpickle62
    December 27, 2008
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    Wow!

    Very nice, beautiful! Worth the long wait of reading your talent. Good luck in the contest.


  • lisapoet
    December 27, 2008

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    Beautiful and deeply moving. A sense of peace translates in each stanza. I felt calm and happy at the end. Thank you.


  • WordsAndWits
    December 26, 2008

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    Beautiful! It touches the soul right to the very end. You have a great vocabulary, and you describe things well. Good luck in the contest!

    - Amalthea


  • BehindTheShadow
    December 26, 2008
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    Wouldn't expect anything less...great job!

  • midnight-whisper
    December 26, 2008

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    Absolutly beautiful. It was quite a wonderful piece and it is even more amazing that you were able to do it in the form required for the contest. Who ever this wpoem is about is truly blessed. A great testament on faithfullness.


  • Borglesnarf
    December 26, 2008
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    Nice

    Very nice narrative in the required form.

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