Every rhyme to gesture kindness,
timed for every violets blue.
All the words stand at attention,
waiting for their sudden cue.
Tally forth the victim's anthem,
sashay out the broken heart,
take the words that touch the soul,
and tell it from the sorry start.
Shuffle through the endless maze
of words that make you shine,
come out smelling like a rose,
It won't' even have to rhyme.
Take the words that blame the world
for everything you do,
save a few just for me,
so I can use them too.
Author notes
It's not a lie,
if you believe it.
A contest entry
- Light and Humor For Chistopher by mysticstorm.
700 points, ended January 19, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For Suseann, To Cheer Her Up by ecrivain01.
1050 points, ended November 11, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Quite encouraging piece! It veils the darkness of circumstance with a light of hope. Thank you for the brightside view.
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Cute poem ...
but I was surprised to see the motto of the Republican Party in your AN.
Thanks for entering in any case. -
Brill
Very good poem love the way it rhymes so well and makes sense ! its a great read
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wow loved it!!!!!!!!!!!
good job
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I guess I'll join the many who have noted that they enjoyed this poem!!
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Keen insight hidden in this
Subtle yet distinct bite in these words that flow like honey. Very insightful and yes we all have done that... even those written in pain later become a validation of our whateverness. I like this much. deeper than it looks at first glance.
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I like this...I know, we all tell lies to ourselves...I've sashayed out mine from time to time. Thanks for your comments! I really loved it!
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Very interesting piece you have here. I love teh end the most:
"Take the words that blame the world
for everything you do,
save a few just for me,
so I can use them too."
My only wonder is in line 12 where you write won't' ??
Great write though!
Good luck and thankyou for entering my contest. Also, thanks for making me laugh!
-heva
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I think you are a wonderful soul, that comes from reading some of your poetry.
Thanks for sharing this bit of humor with us.
Mistycat
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Shuffle through the endless maze
of words that make you shine,
come out smelling like a rose,
It won't' even have to rhyme.
I loved those lines, and this poem! Amazing job
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Wow so true! well, at least on this site! Great write!
Peace Love
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I found this more touching than funny. Thanks for entering, truly.
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amazing job on this..
the last stanza has to be my favorite
it ends it perfect,
great flow and great imagry,
very nice job on this -
incredible.
i love this. the rhyme is totally natural and flows wonderfully. the last stanza is perfect for the end of this, i can't describe it, but it ends everything so well.
i only wish i had the words to tell you how lovely this poem is.
thanks for the read,
kate -
Very creative. I loved your word choices, especially those in the 2nd stanza.
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so cool
here you write a poem in Rhyme about writing, and mention free verse in it. very nicely done. it's a gold in my book, congrats on the bronze. Nic
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Excellent flow here. The words themselves that pen our tales are shared amongst millions and I don't think we can ever use them all up. Even if we try.
Shari
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Wow, really beautiful stuff. Gentle pace and light writing, really deserved the gold but hey. Still an excellent piece of writing.
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Congrats on the bronze my brother, to me this speaks of gold. I love the gentle pace, and the scattered rhyme, gives this a subtle note of grace.
Beautiful job, and love the style of your quartrains here. Well done.
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Yeah!
So...you won a trophy from Kim too! Well done. I love this. I think you wrote this in a way that the reader can so totally identify that it might seem that you're speaking directly to them! 
Brilliant! 
The last stanza sums all up nicely:
Take the words that blame the world
for everything you do,
save a few just for me,
so I can use them too.
Couldn't have said this better myself!
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Well done...great imagery and love the metaphor...very creative you are...deeply thought provoking and so creative...
Thank you for sharing. I know he'll love it.
Kim
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its true its true!!!
i read this poem a while back and i still love the last stanza, but i feel from this read i appreciate the poem and understanding of it more this time..you still leave the reader with a head full of thougts, something your so very good at!! lol -
Ths is really good. I like the descriptions you used, especially the image of words standingat attention,just waiting for someone to happen along one of them and use it. The rhyme was a nice touch, and you used it in such a way to make the poem easier to read. Overall, great job!!
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this is awesome, i love the ending! great job, keep on writing!
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Beautiful, I really liked this poem. Good luck in the contest
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Yah!
It was very beautiful you did a wonderful job. It's very simple but it's powerful. Great Job.
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You found some mighty Choice Words to go along with your title! This was very enjoyable to read!
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lovely
the flow is perfect and i thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece, good luck in the competition and take care kathrin xx -
Wowzers! I don't think I've read a rhyming piece from you before, have I? This is really great...the flow is natural, and the rhyme is unforced and adds to the enjoyment rather than detracting.
"Tally forth the victim's anthem,
sashay out the broken heart,
take the words that touch the soul,
and tell it from the sorry start."
My personal favorite line. Loved the use of the word sashay.
Hope we can catch up soon...life is crazy, as usual, her in Texas. Much love, Tabby
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how very elequent reminds me of old english poetry, very creatively penned, a real old treasure
nice write indeed
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Not a bad piece. Almost a Baltimore street-writers poem.
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LOL Have you turned into a bard these days? How cute with all your rhyme and rhthmn. I thought it had a good flow and it was very easy to read. It sounds almost like a poem you'd read on new year's eve because it seems to be about letting go of the past and always moving forward. Lestways, that's my impression of this poem. You did a good job here.
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Giving words life. That's what it is all about for those of us who write. Very well done!
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This is so true if you believe it....I have to agree if you believe in something enough it does happen maybe not the way you had exactly planned but it does happen.Good luck to you in the contest,hope you win.
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a gentle play upon the words and soon you have a con game...a master task to be unfold, my how can it be lie, when you yourself believe it...
if the truth be known is not poetry but what we ourselves wish it to me?
excellent my brother
and always you leave us something to think upon
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Shuffle through the endless maze
of words that make you shine,
come out smelling like a rose,
It won't' even have to rhyme
these would be my fav lines. Can relate to these ones. Overeall an amazing thought penned here...
Luv
Susan
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I Get It
LOL...I do get it now. I guess I should have read this sooner. You don't usually rhyme but it suits this piece. I truly enjoyed the read. Lovingly yours,Gypsy
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A great little poem with a refreshing message. Happy trails.
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Awesome. I didn't even notice the rhyme as I read through, I was just busy running to the next line. It mystified me, although you're author's note sheds some light on it. Excellent.
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Do I detect a bit of truth muffled under all that subtlety. Nay, there is a lot of truth there hidden. We all write of things, and people disguised as something else to be gleaned and deciphered by the reader. You have certainly chosen some shinny words for this write my friend. My favorite verse is the last one which I really think is a great summation of the poem. This is my kind of write. Thanks for sharing with us here.
Bless you Lowell, and Happy New Year too.
Ron
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Very nice.
The spoken truth penned in words,
You have said it all my friend.It's like your tongue is dancing behind your lips when you write. I am amazed at your work.
This was an awesome piece that i enjoyed very much. The flow and the rhyme was excellent.
And your title was the perfect one for this piece.
Great job!
-Mandi
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A farly decent look within the hearts and minds of many of us who post here. We all have an agenda held sacred to us within our words. This shows a few of those file drawers open for a look.
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this one ...
this one is very interesting... it almost sounds like reasons to write a poem but it is described in a poem wich makes it even more interesting
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OH SO TRUE
No one's perfect brother...I wrote on a similar topic not too long ago...
The first stanza is an eye opener...Almost feels like, the lie is standing at attention, suddenly...To be called upon on cue...
Lies and regret...Powerful emotions...Things to drive men mad if we let them...
I think my favorite line in the entire poem though, is line 5.
"Tally forth the victims anthem" just gets me. I like it. Use an apostrophe on "victims" because it is possessive of the anthem.
It's intriguing isn't it, to think upon just how human the famous poets of old were, how much did they cover up, that we never knew, how grand did they make themselves seem? It's probably not THE meaning of the poem, but, it's one way of looking at it, and it is very very deep. I like it, Liam.
The third stanza almost reminds me of someone, who's trying to convince themselves, and the fourth is them being in denial no longer. Am I even close? LOL
Awesome Liam, this was a very good poem. I love it!
Blessings brother,
BRANDON
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take the words that blame the world
for everything you do
save a few just for me
so i can use them too..
i really enjoyed these lines, a real enjoyable read.
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I love your rhyme pattern here, and the words are perfect! So much fun to read and enjoy! Very good!
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WoW!! Moved my heart beyond anything that could. Loved your last stanza and this seems like my first time reading something in rythme for you. Flows like water and rythmes like greece songs. beautiful and touching truth through your lines.
Thanks for sharing.
God bless
~Noor
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Excellent job Lowell! I was impressed with the last few lines in this. Your words spell out the truth! THANKS!
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Wow, What a great job. What a marvalous trip of the tongue. Clever thoughts. It's a modern twist on, "Roses are red.." lost love, etc. Wow, really well done. Thanks!
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such truth.
and your authors notes just reinforce it.
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Lovely
Thank you dear Irish. And cashay out the broked heart! I know those words so well. -c
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Very Frank!
This sweet rhyme is very therapeutic and cathartic. I'm bookmarking this one! Keep 'em coming! Peace.
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Nicely done! You just take the pure meaning of words and turn them into purest essence!
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Well done. I enjoyed this poem thoroughly from start to finish. I like the concept behind this poem.
Great job
Mike
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Well, first of all...... Im not first!
Second, i really like it!!! I love the ending stanza- its just perfect!
My other favorite part is:
"Tally forth the victims anthem,
sashay out the broken heart,
take the words that touch the soul,
and tell it from the sorry start.
Shuffle through the endless maze
of words that make you shine,"
this poem sounds great read outloud....slowly...such a beautiful choice of words! Bravo, maestro!
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Choice Words
A very descriptive Title.
I realy like this the structure is great and the Rhyme is excellent I see nothing forced. the flow is realy smooth.
And your choice of Words are so human and not mechanical.
What can I say an Excellent write.
ED.
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Good write
Interesting, and creative.
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I don't recall you ever doing rhyming poems! Haha! Well, I think the rhyming stands nicely by this. I like the personification in the first stanza. The words are more like a person than a thing.
Síochán leat
~Mairéad~
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