I open the attick window
The icy wind perices my skin like a thosaund shards of glass
I do not stir for this is what I deserve
The rooftop so inviting
Mist spiraling and swearling beckoning me to come closer
To sit on the chimney pot
To tear flesh from bone
Those who have my best interset at heart
Hold me close
I do not respond to their embrace
They Pose the following questons
"whats wrong?"
"Are you alright?"
"You know you can always talk to me I am always here for you, you know that don't you?"
I do not reply
For I am a
Unworthy
Inpure
Insignificant
Agrevating
Irritable
Burden to bear
For I deserve much less than them
I shouldn't be so selfish and linger with them
They deserve far better than the likes of me
For I deserve to go out to the edge of the roof top
And jump
A contest entry
- the emo's suisidal's and/or pyros by xXemo-teddybearXx.
400 points, ended January 15, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - desperatly depressing by frozenblackpetals.
550 points, ended February 4, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Really powerful write! Simple, and I can identify with it a lot. Never think that you are unworthy though, and you are never alone. *hugs* I'm adding you to the finalists, the emotion in this is great. The only thing I would do is check spelling.
-Lena -
ohmigosh ohmigosh and oooohhhmiiigooosssh!!
this is the best one i've read today!! ^^. yay!!
i totally just adored this. I loved the flow, the format, the wording and the images you cast! the effect of the quotes, and then the string of degrading words following it just soooo effective. totally awesome write!! thank you soooo so much for entering!!
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thankyou for entering my contest,
this was really good
i loved the emotion in it
well i sat great job
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well i dont know u and i sure as hell dont think this is true. i love all my friends and u are one of them im not being all nice because i pitty u. i dont pitty ppl its their let em srew it up its what i say but u my dear, are amazing u have something to life for and i hope this is just a rant. reading your stuff is like me reading my own. u are alot like me and if i know how i am then i know that u write druing ur lows and that is bloody ok. because we have have lows and we all know how it feels. but u are worth it i promise u that.
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wow, powerful words of self hatred, very well written though
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well writen
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If you were unworthy of us.. I wouldnt want to know you. trust me on this one. you can think it all you like.. but NOTHING'S going to change. You are one of the most special friends I have, and will ever have. Don't change that, Emily. I love you.
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Oh ya, and u r not unworthy inpureinsignifficant agrevating irritable burden to bear and u dont deserve less. Even if i dont know u personally...I feel liek thats not what u r.
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This is a really good poem. Sometimes i go on my roof and think to jump, you capture the real emotions of it. You are such a great poet!
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No you bloody well don't! Nobody deserves that, Emily, no matter what I say when I'm depressed! OK, rant over now. It was well-written, though.
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a eye opening poem i hope it isnt true
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wow
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