For now I have but to dream of the time when my pen will write on the sky. I should like to dip it in the sea when it needs to be refreshed and lie on the beach writing to the world that I love only you.
I would write your name on every fluffy cloud that passed over head.
When I capture the could I'd sabotage every drop of rain in that falls from them so that no matter where it rained your love would make the flowers grow.
I would have the snow trace you on the ground with each little unique flake that falls.
I would trace your image in the constellations each night and send star ships to chart your eyes.
I would trace each rainbow and make them permanent so they would always brighten your day.
I would still wish for a bigger surface to tell you how my heart bursts for and ask God to enlarge the sphere just a little more for just one more millimeter to tell you I love you.
Maybe when my heart stops beating and I'm in heaven God will grant me a world to write your beauty into... but for now, I dream.
Author notes
JKH & Amaranthine Lover
A contest entry
- Parchment & Ink by RedAquarius.
525 points, ended December 28, 2008, 12 entries
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Wow, this is good. Lots of emotion and heartfelt words. Keep up the great work.
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Thanks for the nicely written entry!
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Wow, this is really amazing. Such emotion and compassion on the subject of love. Good luck to you in your contests and thank you for sharing your poetry with me.
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thanks for the comment...yes i am making it into a song. This is very beautiful, it shows your unconditional love, makes me think of the one i love when i read it. very good job :]
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I love it and i love how much you love me. I love that we have been across the world from each other for 4 months and we love each other more now then ever. This poem give me a small inkling of how much you love me. Its amazing my darling husband.
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This is a sincere sentiment, and divuling one of elevation. the unique flakes have a simplicity that your awareness opens up the galaxy to. You wish to have many questions answered. Here, your search is very much in advance stage of enlightenemtn I think. The bigger surface is one of stability, and your position in it. Well done, lovely metaphors.
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The first sentence seems a bit convoluted, I might edit it to something like, "For now I may only dream...". Also, might consider cutting some of the "I would"s, they overpower it a bit for me. Some good imagery within (the part about constellations/starships). Thanks for your entry.
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Very nice poem. I really enjoyed reading this. Keep on writing.
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Thanks. It's been a while for me so I wasn't sure if I'd be any good.
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