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The Unlikely Whereabouts of Allurement

For all the talk of love and hearts aflutter,

I don't know that it is any the better

than true regard and a greatness

that forces you to willing submission.

 

It is all well to admire the heavens

but when a man can recreate a portion

of a world of his very own creation;

a singular story of courage, of atonement

and of a selection of motion picture moments

entirely his own, then that is true beauty.

 

While an artist's canvas cannot capture

the fleeting emotions across his model's eyes,

those same wondrous eyes will never 

serve for a glimpse into the artists soul

fully as his palette will, or the expression he

wears while holding it at hand's breadth.

 

 

 

Author notes

I chose to write about the beauty that a person's mind can create rather than that which one simply perceives and gasps about.
The stanzas are a little disconnected but I meant for them to be glimpses into things that are, to me, beautiful.

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  • forethought
    January 3

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    I agree entirely with what you wrote about, and i am glad that you chose to write this as you have done such an amazing job, Thank you for sharing this with us!


  • aanika
    January 1

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    While an artist's canvas cannot capture
    the fleeting emotions across his model's eyes,
    those same wondrous eyes will never
    serve for a glimpse into the artists soul

    beautifully written.
    I love this piece.

    • Overcast
      January 5
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      Thanks! Those lines really are the focus of the poem.Glad you liked them!

  • A-muse-in-writer
    December 28, 2008
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    Very good

    I like this one. Very strong.


  • Note The Sarcasm
    December 28, 2008
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    I liked this. The first time I read it, I was sort of unsure about it, but I read it again and I liked it better the second time. Then again, I guess my brain isn't quite processing things right away, so I'll just say that it was good the first time. And the second. Great write!


    • Overcast
      December 29, 2008
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      I was wondering why you didn't comment, actually- seeing as you did on every other one in the contest.
      I'm not complaining, just happy that there was nothing wrong with it.Phew!
      And thank you very much for your time and your kind words


      • Note The Sarcasm
        December 29, 2008

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        Well, when it said that I had read it, I actually didn't have time to. I had clicked the 'next poem in contest' button and then looked at the time, and it was one of those "oh sh*t" moments.

        • Overcast
          December 31, 2008
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          No, that's okay.I didn't mean to complain.
          Thanks again!


  • Jesann gold member
    December 28, 2008

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    Mmm I really like your take on the word prompt.
    Wonderful thoughts here, nicely penned.
    Well done


  • shiratikva
    December 27, 2008
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    I really enjoyed the poem. Good luck in the contest


  • oceanbluize
    December 27, 2008

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    A great take on beauty, and the absence of it from certain points of view. Perspectives where it cannot be seen, but can be reflected. Aesthetic parameters exist in so many different ways, for beauty is in the eye of the beholder. Thank you for sharing...
    ocean.


  • hks
    December 26, 2008
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    very very nice ;D

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