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Her Endless Journey

Eyes lusting over sleep
that is nowhere to be found.
She hears voices cracking with

laughter, aimed at her expense.

 

Swatting at her exhaustion,
she tosses and turns on the 

tiny black maggot flies that buzz

in and out of her brain with each 

new thought.


Falling away from them,
she's lost in a rabbit hole,
falling endlessly before
slamming into the ground
where her dreams lay.


She pauses and points,
but her finger is bitten off
by the nightmares that turn
tricks on the corner,
selling themselves short, 
making themselves out
to be bigger than her dreams.


She blinks back reality

as she walks away from the
signs that keep leering at her.

Deeper and deeper she goes
into the dark to touch the scars

of her misguided faith.  Years of 

believing in everything life threw

at her sliced flesh wounds that 

bleed from her blackened heart.

 

A minute short from an alarm
sounding, she pulls herself back
into the now.  Back into her room 

filled with hate, with sheets the 

color of disgust.


The sun starts to creep through

the cracks of the shades,

making facing another day for her

nearly impossible.

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  • poeticweaver gold member
    December 30, 2008

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    Congrates on the Bronze!

    Very descriptive with lots of imagery and metaphors!
    I like this very much, thanks for the great read.
    Much love, light, and laughter~  

    -Timothy aka poeticweaver~ x


  • tomisb
    December 28, 2008

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    You describe the sin of introspection without any standard except self hate. The way that nightmares take just for taking sake. You capture welll the circular logic that depression makes. (I am no good therefore I cannot do anything. I cannot do anything, therefore I am no good.) Like the torture the gods of the branch with fruit out of reach and water to low to bend over and drink you dance all the good wishes into anothers arms. There is a deep and deadly charm to take on the harm of self flagelation. It takes vision and strength in the heart not to go there when times are bad and the bravery of friends tried and true when we slip into the black mire and goo.
    Love, Tom B.

  • reejim
    December 26, 2008

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    To understand the true meaning of this piece,I would have to be involved.Explanations are plentyful to those involved and I'm sure your words are deep with emotions.Great write.Write on thanks REEJIM

  • all faded blue
    December 26, 2008
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    Bizarre and twisted Alice in Wonderland flavor, colored by sleep deprivation and demons of past history. Really quite a good job all around.


  • rainyday woman silver member
    December 26, 2008

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    Impressive piece, a little Alice in Not-so-wonderland, mixed with fitful sleep. I like the piece. Good luck in all you endeavor in life.

    Cheryl


  • Susan John Francis
    December 26, 2008

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    With sun starts a light... Their is so much darkness around and I see many people in it.. Your word paint a perfect picture here....Have a blessed coming 2009

  • StarPrincess
    December 26, 2008

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    I agree

    I can identify with this poem more than care to admit. This is how I was for many years, and still am at times. The void in our souls crated by the arrows of abuse can caue these nightmares to continue, and for some, for the rest of their lives. This is a very dark, heartfelt, emotional poem of sinking into depression and then finding out you still have to face another day of existence. Oh Well, maybe one day people will be able to live without these thoughts that come up at the worst moments.

    Thanks for sharing this.

    Love & hugs,
    Barbara


  • hks
    December 26, 2008
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    not bad for dark poetry

    ;D

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