I would ask you this question.
How do you push beauty away?
When she floats into your life
Like a butterfly gently inwards
It takes all my effort to save
This gentle creature from death
How can I tell you my secret?
The reason why I love the dark
The way you hold me in mystery
And I hold you in longing in a manner
That I will never allow myself to follow
I would tell you that I dream of you
But I am awake every moment of it
My ice cold skin is warmed
From this heat in my chest
For all my strength I am weak.
Your scent is of flowers, life and beauty
So how can I push you away?
I find that I can not do this anymore
I let you land upon my heart
In wonder, I gaze at your fragility
The fearlessness of personality
And the way you give yourself
So tenderly into my care.
Author notes
I have read all four books, but been a little while. I didn't want to try putting this into rhyme as it is meant to be a letter. Hope it speaks to people.
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I really liked this. I think it is an excellent characterization of Edward. Great write.
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WOW! this is such a great piece! it really sounds like edward too. ive not read the books (im planning too) =] but ive seen the film and i can really see him reading this to bella...aww so sweet. good luck in the contest! you should get a gold =D
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Good write
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awwww...i am a glutton for anything edward and bella and this is fantastic...i could see edward writing this!!AWESOME!!!!
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Bella would fall to pieces by this write.
~Oka
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gosh, this was a lot for me to take in. i have read it at least 6 times by now.
first of all, to me, the way you phrased your sentences really resembles Edward's way of speaking [lots of charm and smoothness].
second, i loved the way you added in questions. Edward is puzzled by his love for Bella, so that question asking thing really worked nicely.
lastly, the was a lot of descriptive language.
avoiding rhyme was really good, because this poem turned out really genuine. lovely! it sure spoke to me!
hm, i like the title, but i wish you would have made it more like a letter [as in format] but, considering the greatness of your poem that's not going to really bother me.
Thanks for entering!
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Wow! I have not read or seen the movie. But now you have me interested. Great write. Good luck in the contest. ~~Iridessa~~
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