It's easy to write our conversations
in the covers of literary classics -
dialog romantic & epic
as if it came off Lord Byron's
quill,
'cause no matter how dusty
words may become,
they were once innovative
like this emotion.
These iambic eyes scan
syllable to syllable,
tasting the texture of your
text[s]-
looking for reason
& maybe a little rhyme,
as to why you have stood
the test of time.
I crack the spines on stale
stanzas, listening to the metaphors
they moan,
though we've never [homo] sexualized
our situational irony,
& it's then the inspiration,
crumpled lines on college ruled,
fills my wastepaper stomach,
waiting to be recycled,
regurgitated into a poem
really written like me:
where your rhythmically emphasized
personified pulse skips a beat,
missing the meaning of this
post-consumer, poetry compost
[love] note.
In a list
A contest entry
- where did all the good poetry go? by shirk.
1369 points, ended February 15, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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You are growing into your amazing talent exceptionally well and always have been at your destination.
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Great!
love this!i been gone all year but you were on my favorites list back then and i saw you on so i decided to see how your poetrys grown.This feels diferent from the slam stuff you used to do but it still has a flow that i love...a sence of that which was uniquely you but more..i remember doin a poem after reading one of your slams way back,i called it inspired by your temper.it was short and almost cliche..dont try to do a return read on my poems, i havnt put anything new on yet...xoxo
your the best!!
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Chase is back.
Back again.
Gen gen.
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sorry.
i'll link you to thsi thing i read.
it mindfucked me.
and now, all i can think about is if i really exist or not.
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i like this.
my brain is fried atm.
but you'll get a better comment later.
promise.
and if i forget, remind me.
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Sheesh! I don't know why I even bothered entering... This is fabulous, with excellent use of imagery and devices, as well as that abstractness that I'm a total sucker for. Your command of the English language is utterly exquisite, and I think that the rest of us should just exit with our tails between our legs. This is definitely a winner!
Laura
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I like it Chase.
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i love it when people know how to use literary devices in poems, and incorporate them as text in the poem without it being obvious or a hindrance. the inclusion of 'situation irony' i thought was brilliant.
chandni sums it up well in one word.
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Ohhhh, darling. <3
though we've never [homo] sexualized
our situational irony
I love you. -
I really missed your writing, but I have to say this is very different. It is stronger, and fraught with experienced disappointments and maturity; especially a maturity in the subject of writing/ poetry. There were many parallels of life/ writing throughout the piece and it shows the reader that you are frustrated and confused that you have not been able to write, have not wanted to maybe, and about other things as well. Things the reader has to surmise for themselves. Great write. I am glad that you have written another piece of fantastic poetry.
Carrie
P.S. Bookmarked
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fuck.
I'm not entering that contest.
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Welcome back. This is a good piece to come back with. Some words and emotions are timeless. Others become dusty and stale.
I particularly liked the last three stanzas, but the whole piece is decent. 'Looking for reason...' struck me as a bit trite and sentimental, though in a sense, it does bridge the old and new. I didn't find that the extended sexual metaphor added much, but I'm sure others would disagree.
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I did my real comment over MSN, but wanted to leave you some well-deserved applause here.
nice to see you writing again
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