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Should We Go There?

 

 

 Carefully

    we watch each other,

      and I know

what we want.

 

 But no-

 

 

 

but yes.

 

 

    Angels in heaven

 spy on us

 

    and we'll deal with our demons later...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

when your beliefs collide with your desires, which will win?

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  • acoustical
    December 26, 2008

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    in the last line i don't like the "and" as the first word. you don't need it.

    but it's a good poem, however short. sometimes its best to be short.

    thanks for entering!