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Wishes were snowflakes

To sereneade emotions,
as a fat man in a red suit
spreading good cheer.
If wishes were snowflakes
melting the lines of age, and
purity washing its poverty way.

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  • HopelessScribbles gold member
    December 26, 2008
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    beautiful wish

    hope it comes true , life will be much better for it, thank you for this entry, good luck
    VOE


  • rinzurajan
    December 26, 2008

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    true...really wish we get over mr.santa and live Christmas in its true spirit...
    we have lately forgotten Christ on Christmas and it's all about the bling...

    Merry Christmas


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    December 26, 2008

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    lovely premise to this poem!
    well done!
    I may have made my second line the first..
    to open it a little more smoothly.....

    the message in it is a powerful wish,
    way to write with only 25 words!

    ears/Seattle
    GREAT Ink and Soul in you!

    • haley27 gold member
      December 26, 2008
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      Thank you

      Thank you for the wonderful comment given to my poem. Haley27