Some fellow with a tie
reads a ticker-tape,
announces my imminent
portfolio divestment,
speeds me to accounting
to settle up.
Economics of supply and demand!
Overnight, undervalued hours
(now scarcity-driven)
skyrocket.
Paper surpluses
stockpiled for senior
“later”s
post powerful depreciations,
plummet in face
of unforeseen circumstances.
Precedence and progress
solemnly reconsidered
with an impetus
denied immortals,
sufficient to overmaster
ingrained inertia.
In this priceless period,
priorities, plans, exertions
align -
newly prized opportunity
is [still] offered daily
to institute intentions,
reconcile relationships,
discharge devotion’s bonds
to those loved best
with every remaining
beat,
breath,
beginning.
Author notes
taking stock: to make an appraisal of resources or prospects
ticker-tape: stock market report, or heart electrocardiogram print out
portfolio divestment: cashing in for current value all one’s assets
precedence: order in rank of importance
Theme: economics of a fatal diagnosis
POY Contest
A contest entry
- Poem of the Year - POY - by Bear by Arkbear.
12500 points, ended January 1, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Ah, this is such a clever poem! I got your metaphor - after a couple of reads, the economic downfall and ramifications a metaphor for a personal medical crisis, and how that changes the "economy of being". This reads aloud wonderfully, too - the use of sound - alliteration and assonance - is superb!
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Hello ~
Another terrific entry.....a few areas I would have edited before entering....but it's you write, first
I am searching for message right now.....you have given us a great glimps into an area many of us fall short in experience.....but as a man who has delt with these people, I know where each word came from......days, years past.....and present & future ~
No end to such economics....only a level which can rise until we all drown ~
The main thing I find....*stumblinb* in this write, is your format....I believe you could have broken S*'s in better places.....allowing me (the Reader ) to grab hold of one thought....disect it.....and then move on to the other ~
But......not bad at all.....good luck & God bless,.....thanks for coming out to support the POY
Bear ~
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Hello, and welcome to the POY
I love this poem! Unique theme, very well-penned, with a vocab that appealed to my love of verbosity; I respect any poet who can use big words without sounding forced. Well done, and good luck!
Laura
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Hi there and welcome to the POY I did find this to be an interesting piece nicely written Remember no editing once a judge has commented.
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What an interesting work.
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You always do such a fantastic job of bringing home an essential, impacting message... poetry that matters. I love how you extended this metaphor so perfectly. I am amazed at the parallels you draw. This thing is absolutely loaded with consonance which somehow makes the sound quicker and more like a ticker tape or something... a really cool effect it had on my mind as I read. I love how you have examined such important thoughts from a distance, and yet certainly have the wisdom of first-hand experience. This is really well done. Good luck in the POY.
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Aloha and welcome to POY!
This is a wonderful entry...thanks!
I am not sure some of the other judges will agree...
but that's why there are so many of us! lol...
I write in this style also...
Best wishes in the contest and always!
Write on!
Remember: No editing once a judge has commented on your work!
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