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Sudden Impact

I'm seeing this eruption now,
Just like a man raised his brow.
Silently uncontrollable..
Bounded by a great emotional wall.

Supposed to be a romantic scene,
But suddenly it changed to a deadly grin.
Finding how all of these started,
In near time, everyone will be grounded.

For the sake of peace I'll try,
Or else there's no other way than to die
Of pain..of anger..
And then the rest will suffer.

I have no intentions or whatsoever,
Other than to be loved beyond forever.
More than what is in existence,
Even for just once..

Author notes

What will you feel if you're on a romantic time and place but suddenly it became a night of pain and anger that no one have ever expected?..Can you continue the day and still hope?

What will you feel if you're on a romantic time and place but suddenly it became a night of pain and anger that no one have ever expected?..Can you continue the day and still hope?

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  • sense surreal
    January 17
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    I really don't know what happenned and obviously, it seems so painful to tell...but if you were to ask...

    maybe call it a day and give it another go sometime;
    a second chance

    I still believe in giving benefit of a doubt
    and also they say...When it hits you, it hits you...So CHILL
    maybe just maybe

    uy magpayo ba


    • crimsonspark
      January 24

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      oh thank you for being honest..yup maybe I forced to finish this poem without "hitting me hard"..hehe hope to see you again on my future poems.. ^_^