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spending time embracing juliet

love

 

Collapse our love onto bedsheets

and say "I love you" like you've never meant it before.

Capturing always in a glass jar,

a time capsule of who we are.

 

I have always wanted to hold on to

our moments and celebrate our victories.

And tonight, I am becoming one with the

young lady of my reality.

[she's everything to my needy heart]

 

Take me under your skies

and show me how, with wings,

we fly together and get lost in this moment.

Under our umbrella of emotions and sweet satisfaction,

there is so much more to feel.

 

It's you and me

and all this love.

I become captivated by your vision,

the baby blues and the intensity

of how you hold me.

 

Love's glow becomes our downpour

and we drown in its rain.

 

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Pic Credit: http://princessambrosia.deviantart.com/art/love-54771442

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  • SubKitten
    May 15

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    Astounding piece! The emotion comes through very clearly, and the descriptions were beautifully done. This is one of those pieces a lot of readers can relate to, which is a wonderful touch. And the flow is smooth and strong.


  • trekkergirl
    January 3

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    I like the picture. And I truly do like the poem. It flows wonderfully and says a whole lot in it. I love it that you drown in love. Great creative write. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into this friends reading list.


  • toomysterious
    December 29, 2008
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    Absolutely amazing imagery.


  • Sortingthroughlife
    December 26, 2008

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    Not gonna lie, this is probably my favorite poem.

    You've done a wonderful job!
    Love you bunches.


  • forethought
    December 26, 2008

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    This is beautiful, lovely, refreshing ... there are barely words that describe it; it's genuine, raw emotion so beautifully tapped, one cannot help but wish that they were the Juliet that had some how snagged such a Romeo. There is too much beauty to be noted; thank you so much for sharing this with all of us; what a wonderful thing thing to read when feeling lonely Christmas Day.

    I hope you win. Even if there is some poem that magically and vindictively makes its' way into your contest that is technically better (who knows?), I doubt it can evoke the emotion as this piece does. I cannot thank you enough for this, and the beauty of it is I don't quite know why.


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    December 25, 2008

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    Lovely, lovely...I did not find it cliche at all...goodness,
    it was ...refreshingly ......GENUINE and FEARLESS....
    What a beauty of a poem that emits the beauty of
    love!
    ears/Seattle
    thankyou for sharing your poem with us!
    Sure to melt the winter storms that surround us all.

  • x26ss
    December 25, 2008

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    This poem is very well written. I felt a little cliche with some of your metaphores. But overall not much to critisize. Nice effort.
    Good luck.
    The last line is really good, it saves/makes the poem in my mind.


  • Immortal Obscurity Greeters member
    December 25, 2008

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    This is beautiful, sweetie I'm so glad that you and this lovely lady are happy together, and I sincerely hope that she cares for you as much as you care for her Very well done & much love to you both, now and always!


  • FindingMeInJesus
    December 25, 2008
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    Wow, this is amazing. Really romantic. You, as always, have a great way with words. Beautiful!!


  • blueyez
    December 25, 2008

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    wow this is the appitemy of romance! Very very well penned! I love your writes but this is one of my most favs and has been bookmarked!!! I shall read it time and again. It actually has inspired me to write a love poem myself I think!
    Peace and Love


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    December 25, 2008

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    Beautiful and Profound

    I love it! It is so intensely full to overflowing with love. It has such a sweet emotional feel to it. I love the last two lines the most. It touched my heart for I have a soft spot for the rain. Fantastic write friend. Regards, Gypsy

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