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Lady Fair & The Missing Prince

Castle dense, the stairing spire
Instantly intrigued the Prince,
For Lady Fair, his wed desire
Will for her vow, pay half a pence.

But that was not the wisest way
Speeding forth for someone’s hand
Especially if the King must pay
the royal wedding's high demand.

For as he ran, he slipped on ice
Then smashed his princely face,
Now there won’t be, to his demise,
A wedding taking place.

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  • BluesMan gold member
    February 23
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    Such a shallow Beauty concerning the royal beast Heheh Nice rhyme and flow Thank you for entering my contest


  • myrataal silver member
    February 11

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    Ah, so splendid in its wry humor!

    You are such a star writer, do you know, Little Snow-white?



    I must say I feel sad for the poor Bridegroom-to-be ... One must watch one's step in love (and in war!).

    Be well, M'Zeal!

    Love
    Myra

  • sleepinglion
    January 29

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    oops!

    There's many a slip twix cup and lip, from hero to zero in one moment. This is a good example of how we take ourselves too seriously, pride comes before a fall,LOL


  • Room without doors gold member
    January 19

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    Outstanding

    I found this intriguing. We are used to the prince winning his lady- not missing the wedding due to an accident! I thought this was an amusing poem that makes us question "And they all lived happily ever after". I liked the fantasy element and the smooth flow of rhyme. Best of luck in the contest.


  • AbidoodleCullen
    January 18
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    haha! this is sooo cute!
    Thanks for the great read!
    <3 Abi


  • Robin Candor
    December 28, 2008

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    This is like a nusery rhyme. I'm not diminishing the value of it but simply saying that the rhythm is of the sort one would read to their child while tucking them into bed. Perhaps that is a better compliment than we realize? Things that stand the test of time are often written in this venue. One must have the eye of a child and the time of an adult to just simply play with words. You have both my dear. RC


  • suseann
    December 27, 2008

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    Well this short rhymed well versed story is a peach!  Sad,but with a moral too. "Haste makes waste" .


  • xxvampyregirlxx
    December 26, 2008
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    this is amazing!


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    December 26, 2008

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    Such an imaginative piece here, taking us to castles and maidens and pleasantries of an age far forgotten from today. Taking repast to enjoy such times ahead may have been his duly call. less speed more haste, now he sits with sorrowed face. I like this, reminds us to watch our step during the wintery days too. Good job.


    • CookieZeal Greeters member
      December 26, 2008
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      Hah! What a very special comment and analyzational review that was! It adds another dimension to this parody of life's plans and events. You must be a good teacher.

      Thanks so much, fellow poet!

      • Silent Cougar Moderators member
        December 26, 2008
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        I enjoy writes like this, ones that can awaken the mind, and take you to childhood stories that we tend to leave behind. Done in a fashion so clearly followed too. Thank you for sharing.

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