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I could only dream...

Knowing you has been a fantasy come true
I would never demand anything from you

And... This is something priceless

I'd never thought
I'd experienced, this magic you've brought...

if only I could give back what you've given me
But... for now I could only dream
And with this...
I'm fortunate, I'll never ask for more than this

Just let me dream this dream
and that's all...

Author notes

sorry my rhyming might be a bit forced...or maybe way too forced

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  • Rambunctious
    December 26, 2008

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    If you spread your words a little...

    Knowing you has been a fantasy come true
    I would never demand anything from you

    And... This is something priceless

    I'd never thought
    I'd experienced, this magic you've brought...

    if only I could give back what you've given me
    But... for now I could only dream
    And with this...
    I'm fortunate, I'll never ask for more than this

    Just let me dream this dream
    and that's all...

    This easing of words gives more pathos and dreamy quality... But, I love that you write and feel each write gives the world your deeper feelings.
    Thank you, Poetess, for delighting me...

    SensualD.





    • zared
      December 26, 2008
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      Thank you, I am learning a lot from you...your usage of pathos made me smile