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Doomed




In this world, where hatred
engulfed our souls
A world where bodies drops
& they say, no foul play
Tranquility is what
I seek, forever a day
Will I find the harmony?
& peaceful stages
Where our souls
will rest in eternity?
Or will my soul be doomed;
say it was no foul play?
& never find the harmony and eternity


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  • mrocun
    December 25, 2008
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    This is a very interesting one
    deep for christmas day lol but its written well

    samuel


    • theburninglegend silver member
      December 29, 2008
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      Thanx Samuel, I know it sure is dark for a christmas day, but it was one of those moment when things slip out unintentionally, so I kept on going and finaly made out that piece. How was your holiday man, hope all was good and wish you a happy new year's.

      theburninglegend