What is attraction?
One moment captured in a basal reaction.
A glimpse, fleeting yet impressionable, planted in the seed of imagination swirling.
Swimming in the mind, soothing dreams, sinking into the seething depths of desires, setting subtle scenarios and stoking pyres.
Feeling the pulse coursing forth, heat rising to boil, a locked heart fighting to uncoil.
Evaporation of modesty replacing, the advance of passion's facing as the vision forms the foundation to elation.
Crescendo of contemplation yearning for the force within it burning.
Taste on sweet lips, remnants reap involuntary blips upon a personal beat, apprehensions in retreat.
Call of the wild blankets the silence in a stance reconciled for the fall through wanting it all.
Author notes
This is just a new style thing i'm trying.
A contest entry
- 203;203;203;203 ;203;203;&# 8203;​ ;;​;​ by xxlisajazminexx.
780 points, ended December 26, 2008, 13 entries
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Comments
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Oh this rawks. Rhyme that isn't noticeable is an awesome effect sometimes. This is like rhyming prose poetry. Kool.
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Thank you for entering. The only thing I have a problem with is the line division. I prefer a more definite division and feel it strengthens the rhyme, making it more visable.
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i really wanted to break it different but its my new style im playimenting with thats speed rhymes and they cant have line breaks or it messes up the speed. you gotta read it real fast
i hope you can see past its lack of tradition and maybe tell me something about the poem content and style and not just what you think it should be 
thanxu
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The form works well in this poem - keep experimenting. My only complaint is that I have never met a tepid desire. Another word? Very well written. Buff
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you're totally right. seething works better thanxu
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Wow!
This is incredible! Love the content, flow, internal & external rhyme, everything 'bout it is sublime! This should definitely have a name, but it's not a quain!
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Hello Sunshine
Could you please tell me what Form this represents.....lovely btw,
Uncle Bear ~
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idk if its a form it just popped out maybe its a Darkquain
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I love the free verse!!!
lol
I am not so fond of story-esque styles, though I do think the way you formed this works well - mainly because it is short and direct (yes, I get lost when they are long lol). This is so very well spoken, a truly thought provoking piece to ponder. Wonderfully spun piece my dear!
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this is not bad
a good piece -
well ur new style worked out great
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Awesome imagery darkie. I'd say this is one of your better writes. I like the experimentation as well trying new styles, was cool.
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this is a great write
soft romantic loving
the style laid out nicely
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thank you for your entry
tho this seems more for the LOVERS and not anything about being a parent or about a child as the contest requires....
thank you anyway for the entry -
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oh WOW i totally didn't get that it had to be about being a parent or child but attraction can turn into love and that can lead to other stuff to make a child
i'm close here
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lol!
its ok hunny
it was a beautiful write!!
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