I wonder what I'll be when I see all there is to see.
Will there ever be such a state, such a place?
I envy those with it all deciphered.
Those who are logical, and those who have faith.
I can't say who is right and who is wrong,
but those who are strong in what they believe
make me wonder how they came to be.
My beliefs are like willow leaves waving with the wind.
Ever blowing
this way
and that way.
I wish I were in one of the books on my shelf.
Whatever part I'd play at least I'd know myself.
Dark or light, either would suffice.
Just to know what I am.
But in this world, I'm doomed to gray,
doomed to willow leaves,
doomed to be me
stuck on this fence for eternity.
Guess I'll make a choice eventually
when I've thought I've seen all there is to see.
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Edman
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Ooo. Stunning. I love the allusion to the willow leaves, it fits so perfectly!
I don't know if you're a big music person, but I would recommned for you a song called 'Galileo' by Indigo Girls. It seems sort of to fit this piece, in that ther eare some who appear to have it all figured out even if you don't. (How long till my soul gets it right/can any human being ever reach that kind of light?)
Anyway, this is a great piece. I'm very glad I had the opportunity to read it. Thank you for entering!
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You sound like an intelligent and sensitive person. Black and white thinking can be a sign of immaturity.
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My beliefs are like willow leaves waving with the wind.
Ever blowing
this way
and that way.
great metaphore, great line. I can identify with your write here. With the position of wait and see. There was a spelling mistake:
stuck on this fence for etenity.
Not a big deal to me though, but you might want to fix it.
Good luck on the great premise.
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