last December,
I was crying,
for you my dear friend,
as if you were but dying
crying all day long,
this December,my eyes're dry,
they say that I am strong,
with no tears in my eyes
singing merry songs,
though you're dead and gone.
life is so complex,
we are strange creatures,
when I learned that you are dead,
I thought about my future,
and felt myself alone.
so, here I am,my friend,
with happy face apart,
mourning is invain,
it can't touch you heart ,
it's no use to bemoan
you see, how un attractrive,
how hateful is my soul,
your love was very deep,
but I have no console,
my heart is but a stone
What did you think
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too nice.yes we shouldnt mourn on someone gone or passed and especially the one who loves us.cuz if he or she s here they ll not let us cry.and thats wat we should think and dont mourn.really touv\ching poem.
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Well that was something really emotional and a piece reflecting the inner poem I enjoyed reading it but there are some typing mistakes like yuo wrote 'eyes'r' it should be eyes're similarly in 8th line you typed teras it was tears I guess. And you need to put another e to you'r and just put the "i's" capital and some other words too. Anyways My favourite lines were:
"you see, how unattractrive,
how hateful is my soul,
your love was very deep,
but I have no console,
my heart is but a stone"
But a stone, that was deep really. Welldone and you gave a bit pain too. Just Good Luck!!! cheer up
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A LOT OF SAD ELEMENTS IN THE POEM MAKE IT SOUND PAINFUL...
HOPING JOY AND HOPE COMES TO U SOON...
AFTER ALL ITS CHRIST'S BIRTH...
MERRY CHRISTMAS...!!! -
Dark and deep
the poem is dark and deep but I dont understand why you think like this. yes one has to fight for his love and life but no one will have a stone like heart.
hope you will see the brighter side of life also.
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