Hearing those four words pulverizes my soul
Repeated so very often when someone gets close
Now expected the pain can be concealed
Smiles and laughter an easy feint in these situations,
Never do i feel the need to reveal my suffering
Too considerate to hurt others with my agony
Lies flow effortlessly and shield my shattered remains
From those four words that must be true,
"Im disappointed in you"
"You're not good enough"
"I don't love you"
Cutting to the core of my worthless existence,
Continuously these words are said to me by loved ones
A failure barely alive but not willing to live
The incapacitating pain grows with every experience
Im left waiting for the blade to sink deeper.
Author notes
Eh, this is an older write from a year ago, i wasnt a part of AP at that point in time...
I did a little bit of editing though
A contest entry
- Cutters tell me why by Maili Knephthan.
400 points, ended January 15, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make Me Feel Again by lilblueeyesmine1978.
525 points, ended January 15, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do you think
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I know this pain my father's favorite saying to me was five words though. "You should've never been born." I hated him for that. Thanks for the wonderful write.
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Nicely written. I could feel and hear the emotions behind this . I t was well written and had a lot of a story behind it. I thank you that you entered.
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oohhh heard these be said so many times....like a knife to the heart and your writing expresses this well
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you have me close to tears with this one and i've been through this poem and it's harsh facts quite a lot. i feel that this is close to me and to others. it sucks that those we love are able to cut us so deeply and what hurts even worse is the fact that when they do it on purpose to hurt you (and not by accident) it hurts worse than ever before. it's so much more painful when someone you love wants you in pain and agony and doesn't think that you're doing your best or that you're even worth the time of day. wonderful work at getting at people's heartstrings.
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Thats so sad. Its horribel that people can acctuially say stuff like that to other people and not care how much it hurts. Even if you say it to someone and they laugh it off you should know from the hurt in their eyes that it affected them and cut them deeply. Trust me i know how it feels for something like that to happen to you. Another Great poem I really like it
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Ooh. This is so....wretchedly sorrowful and literally painful to read. Wow. That was some intense emotions there. Had chills running through me and tears coming to my eyes. Wow. Lil bro, this was awesome.
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