I hear his voice in the silence,
See his smile in the dark.
When i'm feeling down,
All i need to so is remember the look in his eyes when,
he says, "I Love You."
A simple glance from him can calm my tottured soul,
heal my battered heart.
He sees the bruises that everyone has left,
Sees the scars all my past loves have left on my heart.
And despite all my flaws he sees the "diamond in the rough" that i can be
He can tell when i'm upset'
Even if I dont say a thing.
Always asking,
"Baby, are you okay? You know I love you right?"
These small meaningless questions,
Are the most precoius gift that i caound ever be given.
Now he owns my heart.
He has the power to break it in to tiny shards.
I can only hope he sees how hard it is for me to give him that power,
And never lets the tears of heartache to fall from my eyes.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like this poem. I like the way that the words flow and the way that they sound! Great Job!!
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There are a few areas in which the spelling should be checked. For instance, in the first stanza "speak in(SPACE) the silence", and "his SMILE". There are a few other places where I think you could fix that, and I will let you do what you want with your piece.
I like the message that you give in your writing about how you have given your heart and love to somone after all the pain and sorrow you have faced in the past. The last stanza sums everything up and makes it all that much better. Great job!
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