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i went to the store with a whore
but as we walked through the door
the women scoffed
and all the men laughed
so now i get it no more

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Written February 10th, 2004

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  • Naughtygrlred
    February 19, 2004
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    seems to me that it's not that complete i'm wondering about that last few lines they really don't go with it

  • Flagrancy
    February 19, 2004
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    hmm...this poem needed work...idk it just seemed like it was something missing. You'll get it as you keep writing though, good luck