Unsure how to stand
Alone.
Can't make it on my own.
Needing you every day.
Unstable,
Confused,
Hurt.
Unable to stand tall.
Fallen to the floor.
Without you.
Left here
On the
Hard ground
In this desolate world.
For now
I'll have to be content
With learning to crawl.
Author notes
Option 5: Titles - Learn to Crawl
A contest entry
- 5 Options for the Creative Poet (25) by bananasfoster42.
765 points, ended January 3, 15 entries
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Comments
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great take on the title, thanks for the entry =)
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Good job Katrina! It's a good poem. It follows a good sequence, so yeah it's good. Keep writing!!!
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I really love this one!
Wonderful thought for this prompt and
good luck to you in the contest!
Jeremy0826 -
Bravo
I really love this write. The language is simple but very powerful in terms of emotion. Your style is mature and vivid. The piece melancholic but not without hope and that’s one of the main reasons why I like it so much. =)
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Great Write!
This is a brilliant write.
you're just a bit repetitive,
maybe looking for some synonyms for "floor"
and adding some Adjectives to this piece might help a little bit.
Other than those few things this truly is a brilliant write!
Keep writing.
~Annie Shadows
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Thanks for the comment...I'll look into your suggestions.
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