I look d
o
w
n and ))see(( my shell, pink
d-i-g-g-i-n-g into the **soft** wood of the table.
I can f_e_e_l
my curled
and primped hair
///whipping//// and s.t.i.n.g.i.n.g
my face.
I b^a^r^e
my {straight} p:e:a:r:l:y
white
^^teeth^^
I _feel_
my ankles preparing to s/n/a/p
as I >>>>>>>>r.u.n
a>w>a>y
in my 6six6 "inch" heels.
I ssssssstop
and c
o
l
l
a
p
s
e
my perfectly \\\bony///
body s~h~i~v~e~r~s
Tears fill my kohl (rimmed) eyes.
a !SCREAM!
destroys my xperfectlyx trained voice.
I can't ! :::::breath::::::!
My 2 tight jeans
are >pressing<
into the flesh of my hips.
I !cry!
out and c/l/a/w @ my 2 low shirt....
scratching my chest
It doesn't h_u_r_t enough
I t#u#r#n
to the mosaic
of blue veins p.u.l.s.i.n.g
in my china (white)
wrist.
I s/c/r/a/t/c/h
and riiiiiiiip
@ skin and vein
untill I see scarlet
blood
s
e
e
p
i
n
g
out from under my ^nails^
Author notes
Jasper Theodoran aka xContagiousKissesx
A contest entry
- DIRTY [P.r.e.t.t.y] WHORE by Candy Morphine.
550 points, ended January 6, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Oh Sweetie; You're so [D-I-R-T-Y] pretty. by Candy Morphine.
550 points, ended January 23, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - DIRTY PRETTY-PW allowed by Heva Feva.
400 points, ended July 3, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critiscism?
Comments
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Ew, I actually felt physically sick reading this, nobody should have to go through that. It was beautifully written, and has an amzing story line. I absolutely adore the dirty pretty!! Goodluck and thanks so much for entering my contest.
-heva -
Yay!
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we wrote this together sweeting
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haha lol; well this was actually in my other contest and i must of overlooked the beauty in the writing. I think the first time i was distracted by the overuse of symbols. I know it's dirty pretty, but it just seems a little over dosed. But thanks for entering again, it was worth it due to the fact you're on the finalists list this time=]
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i like the way you make the words do down it looks sweet and the poem is great
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well thank you darling.
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This is so much fun to read even. The way you illustrate the words is beautiful. This is a great dirty-pretty. Keep it up! <3
~ToxicSuicide. -
its so gd i feel your pain
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Wow!
I liked this a lot.
You have verrry special style.
It was very fun to read, and I could connect to it on many levels.
Good Write -
Very very very different, unique and innovative I must say. You have a special style. I love it, baby!
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extremely creative.. its enjoyable to read honestly
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I like it. You have an interesting style and I like the way you use DP to *illustrate* your emotions all over the page. well penned, this is descriptive and really draws the reader in. It's disturbing in the best sort of way. Keep it up &hearts
~HH
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this was great. i'm just now starting poems like these, and this was a good example of how it's supposed to be. great job!
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I absolutely love these kinds of poems. I think that you must have a lot of talent to write poetry like this. It is amazing....
Haylee -
Very well written.
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thats amazing!!
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yay, I love dirty pretty and this was aweshome, rather than just puttoing what happened you explained it well and used lots of cool adjectives and imagery.....and you really did make it look pretty
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Hey! Hun I remember this one! Only it was written differently. Is this the one we wrote together?????
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Um... anger, frustration...
Vengeance, maybe at yourself.
Great write here...
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