Oh God
even today I do reminisce that
when I was a young baby
I used to run here and there
away from home and away from my mother
wandering to the forgotten places
for the sake of the learning and fascination
however, even today I do recall that by the evening
I had to rush to the home and by the night I used to be
in the arms of my mother on her bed
with a sound and peaceful sleep
today, when you took the place of my mother
I must confess that
I am back after playing in the battlefields
the evening of my life is in front of me
succeeding night
the arms and bed of yours for my peaceful and
sound sleep is nearby
Oh God...
Author notes
3- God is the ultimate power for the soul, and he's endless.
In a list
A contest entry
- 10 quotes to inspire you contest by Hikari Lady.
700 points, ended December 27, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow
This is such a wonderful poem, it feels like you are praying, and it is so beautifully written. God is indeed our guide, and our family. I love your comparison to your childhood.
Keep writing,
Holly. -
wow to me this reads more like a prayer than a conversation. But it is truly a wonderful write. I feel comforted by reading it. Lets me know that in the ending of my life God will be there like my mother was always there when I needed her.
thanks for sharing this wonderful write and thanks for entering it into my contest. And congrats on winning the trophy it is well deserved. -
Wow! this is wonderful. Love the allegory in this piece. Well done. Good luck to you.
~Mary O
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Beautiful! Indeed God is our ultimate family and the one who will always be there no matter what. I loved how you compared God to your mother when you were little.
Thanks for entering and best of luck.
Much love
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Very nice
and in God's loving arms we rest. Knowing that we are safe in our belief. God is the light and as long as we keep that in mind, our path will be lit! Have a merry Christmas my friend! The Shaker
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Once we come full circle in life, and we have grown older, saw many things, been many places...be it a journey or even if we read it in books...the knowledge accepted prepares the new unseen path as we grow weary...He offers us rest, life everlasting......He' only a step away.....I see you as a man ready to do his will..........and excellent poem....full of life, love and spirit......Novy
God Bless you
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not to be totally unoriginal, but i agree with everything rhondasail said..
very nicly done. and very powerful. -
the evening of my life is in front of me
succeeding night
the arms and bed of yours for my peaceful and
sound sleep is nearby
Oh God...
...I am so very touched by these lines...simple acceptance in a mature voice of one who has tasted life's adventures and finds the coming 'sleep' to be the greatest adventure of all...hauntingly lovely confessional write, my friend...Best wishes in the contest. Peace and Merry Christmas, Rhonda
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