Ink soaked pockets mark these hands and papers
Removing the pen has done nothing for me,
Stained and shamed my hands drip black blood
My proverbial paper heart now wounded and bleeding,
Soaking this notebook with clotted words and phrases
Revealing this cursed affliction of internal suffering,
No longer being able to hide my mottled depression
My paper heart bleeds out leaving this poem behind.
Author notes
My inspiration cam from Spydurpoet and a phrase she used in our conversation.
roninwort
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Beautifully written, Sad but captures the feelings well, you really are talented. Must say it's one of my favorites
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With lessons on line breaking technique, this would flow much better. Also, left alignment would assist the flow. I like what I see here though and agree with Laura.
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This lacked any kind of "oomph" for me and I deliberated for quite a while over it. You got my vote for your usage of poetic device (alliteration)...it is a good knowledge to have for this particular challenge.
Laura
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this reminds me of a song by all american rejects
its good!
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The first poem of the day that i can throw out the bombshell word of powerful!! i liked how it described the process of writing, plus it was short precise and meaningful, thank you for entering and i will definitely take another look at this poem
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I LOVE this! it's just so... wow
even though it's short, it has a lot of meaning in it.
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Wonderful job! Good luck in the contest!
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I love this poem! it practically left me speechless!
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I love it when inspiration comes from a conversation with a friend. I enjoyed this poem a lot. I do think words like "heart" and "blood/bleeding" have been made cliche thanks to teen angst writers, so maybe the poem would be stronger with different image choices there. I liked it a lot anyway.
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i cant say any thing all what i can do is handling u my sword an salute u
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The imagery in this poem is really strong and I like the message of it. I'm sure a lot of writers can relate to this, and that's an amazing feature to the already strong words. I can't help but love this poem. ^_^
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Wow, this is nicely worded. Great imagery and flow. The last line is amazing. Great job, I must keep an eye on you.
Keep it up.
Josh.
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awww nice poem hun! this is amazing! the imagery and the background ... wow they truly set the mood... awesome write!
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Bam! Wow. That was absolutely stunning. I loved this. This is...my favorite poem in the whole world right now that is written by someone other than Robert...lol
That's saying a lot. It's absolutely beautiful.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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