temperature drops
snowflakes fall all around us
capturing each heart
Author notes
Haiku on Winter
A contest entry
- HAIKU by Malabu.
800 points, ended February 2, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A haiku also centers structurally on a pause or caesura ("kire" in Japanese). By juxtaposing two elements or parts (with one of the elements spanning over two of the poem's three lines), the two parts create a spark of energy, like the gap in a spark plug. The two elements of a good haiku may seem unrelated at first glance, but if the reader lingers on them sufficiently, he or she may notice a reverberation. When you realize the connection between the two parts (sometimes called an "internal comparison"), you have a "spark" of realization, an "aha" moment. As a writer of haiku, it's your job to allow the poem to have that spark--and not to spell it out for the reader.
although i love the backdrop it takes away from the poem
thank you for your entry
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Delightful
I love it. !!
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turned all time around this for a minute ~
wow the ending is so reasonable it raised my eyebrows, like a lady heard earlier so a myth didn't stand but her... and there was no oddness in how our spirits are insulated per se in the frigid weather by its alternate beautiful scene.
you did such a nice gravitation of your lines into the twist.
my daughter definitely had a taken up yard play with a snowman and daddy today,
called Carolyn
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Oh I just adore Haikus! This was a very beautiful one! Snow is one of my favorite things about this time of year.
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yes it is beautiful as flakes fall in the moment, love the background in this also good luck in his contest...Voe
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I love the falling snow!
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Beautiful words for just three lines... love the background...amazing
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OH NO SNOW!!!! I like this hon you did a great job on this Haiku
Good luck in the contest hon 
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Wow!
Great haiku friend! I joined this contest too.
I added you as a fave so I can come back and read some more of your work. I love writing haiku. Not all of them are of the perfect sort. I do have a few faves tho. I started a 2-5-5 haiku thread at a different poetry board some years ago, and I cannot forget the first 2-5-5 that flowed from my pen, it was:
friendship
no water required
it sails on pure trust
Anyway, I really liked your koo and I'll see ya around. Merry Christmas to you & yours!
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