Dancing winds do show
All the purities and glow
Beauty is the snow
Author notes
This is a rhyming haiku. Yes, I know, I have gotten many different complaints about my use of capital letter and my use of rhyming in this poem. And that due to these things I have mad some sort of shameful mark across the simple beauty that is a haiku. But personally I like the way this poem took form and I don't see the problem with a rhyming haiku. The capitals are also a personal choice. If these things offend I am sorry. But please try to leave construnctive critizism past these points. Thank you
A contest entry
- 5-15 Words: Blow Me Away by xxRainbowDawnxx.
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What did you think
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Nice!
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supreme delight.
♥ Kathraina -
Indeed it is, something I used to always look forward to as a child was snow. I used to wish every year that it would snow on my birthday, which is the 25th of January. But alas no, it only has done it once. Very nicely put.
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Dancing winds do show
All the purities and glow
Beauty is the snow
winds that drive and clense the world
clense my soul with snow that whirls
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I love how you were able to rhyme your
Haiku out like this. Wonderful work here
and good luck to you!
Jeremy0826 -
lovely rhyming form, nice fow with ease and beauty in content, good luck in his contest
Voe
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Very good haiku! So lovely! Very beautiful!
I don't know if there's a rule in haiku poetry concerning thr rhyme, but I actually liked the fact that you made it rhyme.
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This is a very pretty poem! I enjoyed the simplicity of it just like a Haiku is supposed to be; however a Haiku is supposed to be un rhymed. I just wanted to point that out since the host said he was a stickler for Haikus, he might mention that, Wonderful write and good luck in the contest.
Amy
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Thank you for your comment. But in no definition I have seen of a haiku is there any sort of rule about rhyme
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