watching winter pool
snow piling on the cover
hotel filling up
Author notes
I am working security at the Ramada Inn in Belleville Ontario. The highways are too slippery to drive on. The Haiku pretty much sums up what is going on right now.
A contest entry
- HAIKU by Malabu.
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this has potential...id prefer less use of ing- also no need for authors notes...you do have two images which is a plus
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Yes...brrrrr....It has been one of the coldest winters on record for a long time...Your visuals are pretty realistic....Good haiku!
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watching winter pool
snow piling on the cover
hotel filling up
straglers and wayfarers
crawl like sleepy bears ro hide...
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a suggestion, maybe?
watching winter pool
snow piles on the cover
hotel fills up
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Hotel didn't fill up.
'Hotel fills up' is a syllable short. Thanks.
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This is interesting! It's great when you have some sort of inspiration right in front of you like that. Well done and good luck to you here!
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oh yes winter does that to many and stranded is not very pleasant to go through, nice one, good luck
Voe
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