"I love you and I think I always will;
but you can't save me from myself."
I
Why are you - - - > r u n n i n g < - - - a w a y from me?
Why are you leaving me here all by myself?
What did I do to you to deserve this?
Stop - - - > p u s h i n g < - - - me a w a y baby,
I .need. you in my life, you're the air that i [breathe].
Whats .so.damn.wrong. in your life that you need to r u n - - - > a w a y ?
Please, my love, explain this to me.
II
I need to get my shit ---straight---
a k
My life is all out of w c
p
I'm fucking __everything__ u
Nothing ever goes my way or according to plan.
.Baby.I.Love.You.
This has |nothing| to do with you
But you can't save me,
I'm too far g o n e
III
I need you here by my side to keep me warm at *night*
The blue stars that shine in the early morning don't feel the same without you in my arms.
Meaningless sex with random girls means .nothing. to me.
You know you're the only girl who can make me !scream!
You're so beautiful, so beautiful, so beautiful.
[I.need.to.save.you]
IV
You can't protect me, only in my dreams are you my /Superman/
&He'll Kiss Me and it'll "change" everything
[Even though we know that the more things change the more they stay the same]
I.Am.So.Sorry
I never wanted things to end up like this,
So much for my happy ending eh?
I am drowning in the lake and I can't grab your hand,
I have to learn to save myself this time.
You.Can't.Save.Me.
[PleaseStopTrying]
The End
Or so it seems it has to be that way for us. The chemistry has faded and there is just no more passion or lust between us, meaningless texts fly back and forth between me and the old, and you want to save me, but i'm flying a w a y farther&farther a w a y.
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A contest entry
- & sometimes the prettiness never dies♥ by xxRainbowDawnxx.
400 points, ended December 30, 2008, 32 entries
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Okay first off one of the rules was to only submit left align poems. This definitely wasn't one of those. I had a little trouble trying to read this. And you didn't try and explain it.
I could tell those that it had a lot of emotions in it. Thanks for trying tho. -
This is so raw, I'm sorry if you feel this way, all I can say is that I always feel like I'm messing up everything in my life & yet, somebody else tells me I'm doing my very best, sometimes we have to listen to those who know us best, it isn't always us, although it should be.
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Sweety, I know this is a tough time for you but I know you'll be okay.
you know i love you (:
<3333
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I think you did a great job with this poem....i like the
artistry of it too!
you played with the air and it did effectively add
layer and texture.
we could feel the aching struggle...and fearlessly
honest you were in it too!
well done!
This was a true pleasure to read!
way to write!
ears/Seattle
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so i had this totally amazing comment all typed up and everything and my gay computer blacks out. booooo to dell. so yea, like i said, you have this amazing talent to just take things and make them your own, which is basically what you did with soco's song. im still jealous btw that you were given such an amazing song to work with. you so know how to work with prompts. but i love you and im oh so proud of you babe, you're going to be soo soo happy down here, we'll take over the town. Ahhh its going to be great, you're my starrrrrr
illly to pieces
♥
Soph -
god bby, how can you write so much amazing poetry in one day. I'm stuck with fucking writer's block =/
I love this bby && I can relate so much. Why does nothing ever go according to plan? Something always has to fuck up. When did life get so complicated, gah. I don't want things to be how they ended up either. Someday we'll get our shit together.
ilysfm
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This was brilliant I absolutely loved your great use of the prompt.Good luck in the contest.
I will add a more detailed comment later. -
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