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Stars

    Fears striking you to the core                                                   
Tears running red and white
Seeing my shining knight
in the colorless stars
Waiting for me
to come out
and play.....
                                                   

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  • VanGoghNights
    December 23, 2008

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    ooo

    very interesting, and to convey such emotions in a small amount of words is AMAZING
    Nicely done
    Savina

  • XmmusicXloverrX
    December 23, 2008
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    This was really good, amazing. Great emotion, the whole deal.


  • HopelessPoet1087
    December 23, 2008
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    i like this poem... it has a nice flow to it and its a very calm emotion.... great job :-)