I use to have alot friends, way back in the day
But lost them with time, somehow, most just slipped away
A couple of moves, a change in jobs, a fierce fight here and there
An occasional death, then no one was left, sure seems a bit unfair
The one I gave myself to decided to give me back
With a long list of what went wrong and qualities I lack
He took with him a part of me that still this day I miss
Then left me here to persever in my own emotional abyss
Of course, there are acquaintances I see most every day
Share moments of trivial bullshit, flash some smiles along the way
Maybe one or two of them really listen to what I actually say
But, most only find time for the girl my mind makes me portray
I'm sitting here 'til I disappear, then one day I'll just be gone
The sun will rise, the birds will chirp, and life will still move on
When time has come and life's all done, and I have met my end
Will I even be remembered as the girl who had no friends...
Author notes
BehindTheShadow Brown
A contest entry
- I'm new to AP!!! This is my 1st contest!!! by roninwort.
3000 points, ended January 7, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Melancholy Madness by psychedelichippie.
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Comments
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I loved this poem. It was really nice. Honestly, I thought from the title, It was gonna be kinda stupid, but when I read It I was like Wow. Nice. Good luck in the contest.
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What a philosophical truth you have disclosed in a very beautiful and practical tone..i accept its message and can relate with it..wonderful indeed..
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Aww, this is so sad & so beautiful...
Engaging narrative with a great rhyme scheme & rhythm...
Such an outpouring of raw emotion with an underlying inevitablity in that you have resigned yourself to this fate...
I know how ya feel, AP seems to be my only social life at the mo & I fear I've lost the ability to connect with people in reality... But I have made a lot of good friends & true I may never meet them, but its comforting to know they are there...
Any time ya fancy a chat, give me a shout...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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Oh my this is sad. This is a good place to find friends, online ones anyway. But even here they come and go, though I have one friend from another site since 2001.
But I know the feeling, I've lost friends over the years, so were were more than friends. It always hurts always leaves you feeling down, even worthless. But you want friends and that is the main thing. I see folk below are rallying to show you their support, people can be really nice can't they.
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such a sad write
you've penned your emotions well
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Aww that is so sad. But you'll always have your AP family here ! I love this, great rhyme and flow
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Very deep and emotional. It really struck the reader with the feelings you were trying to emote. Very good.
Thanks for entering and best of luck.
Write on.
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no one like you could be easily forgotten...
A thoughtful write. I don't know where I remember this from but here goes: It's not how many friends you have, but that YOU are a friend. Merry Christmas.
Love, Lane
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Well that just is not soooo.... you are my friend!!
HUGS and Merry Christmas !!!!!
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you are not friendless. i love you!!!! and besides . if you were to die tomorrow . all them people would show up at the funeral. too bad they dont show up now ...
xoxo
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People will always come and go through your life ... just as you did theirs
You're a beautiful person and you won't be friendless forever
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This tells a story of a tragic love that has left the writer to their own personal hell. You do an amazing job with the imagery and present a strong empty feeling that draws the reader into the poem. A great poem, thank you for you entry and good luck.
Ronin
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