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Objective

Objective

On most of the clear and warm summer night
you stood in silence under veil of stars,
watching without eyes
as the moonlight danced on the water

You were kicked and stepped on
burned by fire
Insects crawled all over you,
you never moved a muscle
or felt any pain

At the start of dusk
you were alone by the edge of the sandy shore
It started to get colder
as the nights got shorter
Still, you had no expression

Solid and heavy
nothing could move you,
not even the rising tide
would evoke reaction

You warped and rotted
always alone, by yourself
with all your indifference
completely hollow

Author notes

Option 2 word prompt : Hollow
This is a poem about the life of an intimate object ( a Log)
yet it can be interpreted in many other ways with various perspectives

and thank you for the editing Kathleen a Nazarene!


Great first contest, I hope you do many more!

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  • SpydurPoet gold member
    December 29, 2008

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    Wow. Wow. What an incredible take on the prompt. I absolutely loved where you went with it. I was surprised with where it led you. It was deep and emotional, even in its depiction on unemotional.
    Thanks for entering and best of luck.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~

  • cindyloo
    December 28, 2008

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    This is brilliant. I love how you get the reader to try and imagine what it is. Wonderful take on the prompt.


  • roninwort
    December 23, 2008

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    This is an excellent entry for the prompt you chose. I can literally see whats happening in my head as i read. Beautiful imagery and a very powerful emotion of complete hollowness make this poem unique and very enjoyable to read. Thank you for your entry and good luck.

    Ronin


  • storiesuntold gold member
    December 23, 2008

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    Wow

    For a little bit I thought you were speaking of a person hollow within uncareing and when I read your footnote it truly spun me around good luck in the contest

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